第一篇：雅思寫作7.5分高分心得分享(鄧徽老師學(xué)生自己辛苦整理的寫作資料)

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1.雅思寫作（內(nèi)含大量雅思寫作快速提分學(xué)員心得以及題目為“整理這些短語我掉了一把頭發(fā)”雅思寫作提分短語-每一個(gè)短語均出自劍橋雅思官方指南1-8里面閱讀單項(xiàng)當(dāng)中所有可以用到寫作當(dāng)中的短語）。目前雅思界第一個(gè)整理八本雅思指定輔導(dǎo)書的牛人。

2.高級寫作提升（內(nèi)含每天更新經(jīng)濟(jì)學(xué)人優(yōu)秀詞匯以及短語—記住是每天更新！不是每月也不是每年也不是一輩子！）

3.雅思托福詞匯

大作文的寫作最重要，但是小作文也很重要，不能一直放的小作文不看，因?yàn)樾∽魑娜绻麑懙牟涣鲿?，老是思考，不能?0分鐘內(nèi)寫完，就會嚴(yán)重影響大作文的質(zhì)量。寫作文一定要知道換說法，一個(gè)意思同樣的說法最好不要出現(xiàn)第二遍，這當(dāng)然需要積累不同的句型和短語，比如文章后面給的寫好處的句子要記得換著用哦~~~鄧?yán)蠋熣f大作文要得高分，倒裝句、插入語、強(qiáng)調(diào)句、復(fù)合句和同位語至少各用一次！一開始，我每篇作文都五種句型刻意出現(xiàn)一遍，到后來就用的比較熟。

1把《雅思寫作機(jī)經(jīng)題源大全 》看了三遍，主要是記了上面的論據(jù)。上面的文章按類型分類，可以總結(jié)一下某一方面常用的搭配和句型。我的寫作鄧?yán)蠋熥屛野研赂拍?的文章背背，但我背了兩篇就放棄了。不過我把新3上的文章都看了一遍，把覺得好的句子總結(jié)在了一個(gè)本上，然后背，尤其是快考試那幾天每天背一遍，弄得很熟，所以用起來也很熟。大家一定要看?。。￡P(guān)于模板：我覺得模板還是很有用的，但不是已有書上的模板，大家都知道的那些模板和句型最好少用。因?yàn)檠潘甲魑囊还参宕箢?，我一般練得都是兩邊倒的作文，自己有?zhǔn)備一個(gè)模板，除了問原因解決類的作文外都可以用同一個(gè)模板，所以要練得比較熟，一般寫作文都要用自己的模板。不過我考試時(shí)候還是碰上了問原因類的作文，所以最好是總結(jié)兩個(gè)模板就萬無一失啦~~。當(dāng)時(shí)鄧?yán)蠋熥屛一旧弦惶炜匆黄督?jīng)濟(jì)學(xué)人》的文章，總結(jié)不會的單詞、短語和句型，因?yàn)樯厦娴奈恼露际抢贤鈱懙?，所以文章非常地道，好句子很多~~~上強(qiáng)化課前看過一遍十天突破雅思寫作，覺得還是很不錯(cuò)的，對雅思寫作有了比較全面的了解。但是上面的句型和模板最好不要用了~~關(guān)于寫作文：我一共寫了十篇左右的大作文，小作文要每種至少練一篇吧，快考試前一個(gè)星期我用專門的雅思考試寫作紙卡時(shí)間，大小作文一起一起寫，寫了4套。我覺得大作文不在于要練的很多，但是要刻意的改進(jìn)。寫完一篇文章后要自己改一遍，把看的出來的語法和單詞錯(cuò)誤改了，還要看論據(jù)合不合理，再把看過的好的句型刻意套進(jìn)去，然后如果有條件找給鄧?yán)蠋熃o改改。第一篇作文我寫了一個(gè)半小時(shí)才寫完，當(dāng)時(shí)真是把所有能用的上的好句子和詞組都盡量往里套。鄧?yán)蠋熣f第一篇要是半小時(shí)之內(nèi)寫完就是混的沒好好寫。盡快把能用的上的寫作資料背熟，這樣寫作時(shí)間自然會減少，小作文必須20分鐘搞定，如果你的模

板和句子用的熟，大作文也會很流暢。我的雅思考試作文寫了滿滿的2頁考試紙后，又要了一張寫了一半，還把小作文檢查了一遍（真的檢查出一個(gè)錯(cuò)~哈）。除此之外，我還總結(jié)了四種句型，開頭句型，寫好處的句型，寫壞處的句型和解決問題類句型。因?yàn)樗械难潘甲h論文題目基本上都是要討論一個(gè)問題的好的方面和壞的方面，所以這樣的句式要準(zhǔn)備幾個(gè)（不用太多），而且確定自己背的很熟，最好是每篇文章都換的多用，達(dá)到用的靈活自如。在這里與大家做一下分享。

好句總結(jié)：多用such替換the ,a.例：Admittedly, such issue ,to some extent,has given rise to a bunch of familiar questions.（模板的第3段開頭）開頭句型：（放在文章中間也很好的句子）As a result of constant media attention , A(A指題目話題), once largely ignored,has come to be seen as especially valuable/significant.2(The right of the media to do this)is rarely disputed, but(the way in which it does this)often comes under withering critism.(括號里可以換)As our lives are saturated with the flood of(advertisements),no one can avoid being influenced by ads.(ads 錯(cuò)的，不能用簡寫哦~)(Bad traffic and increasing pollution)are thorny issues challenging every major city in the globe.（in the globe全世界）The issue ofAis a complex and sensitive one.What lies behind …..?(問原因類)After years in the wilderness , the term “ A ” seems posied to make a comeback.(和第一句意思比較像)好處句型！Nothing can be compared with sb/sth ~~(新3的哦，推薦)

2Aexert a positive impact on ….3A can an effective way to(help)……(簡單但好用)

4Few things can be more（impressive）than ….that…(新3的哦，推薦)

5play a pivotal role in …

6benefit from../ profit from…一般

7promot the development of..8A is the cornerstone of …

9remove the barrier for..raise one’s awareness of …常用enable sb to do …sb is the ultimate beneficiary（sb是。的最終受益者，社會問題類說人們應(yīng)該自己也承擔(dān)責(zé)任用）consolidates its status as the..get a clear perspective of..give a boost to..A is an indispensable part of BA is irreplaceable tp BThe signigicant of A to B can never be ingoredA is the key ingredient to B~~A made it possibe for sb to…A exert a peculiar fascination on a great many people.(新3的哦，推薦)

find it impossible to resist the temptationto do ….Needless to say / Indeed ,……（可以放在任一句開頭，很好用哦~）

23develop an unshakable faith in …h(huán)ave a reputation of..Nothing can catch them for …make a contribution to(也可作寫壞處的句子 the city make its own contribution to noise)27 buildbridges between特別的Improve one’s physical and psychological wellbeing /soundness 身體心理健康

optimise people’s living standards 提高人們生活水平

eradicate poverty 消除貧困

It’s not A that are important ,but B

Satisfy basic(human)needs 滿足要求

Ease the tension and conflicts between alleviate the problem of消除沖突和緊張

Be fully aware of the consequences

The impact of（sporting activities）goes far beyond the bounds of(leisure and recreation.)3 壞處的句型drive up the crime rate..widen the gap between Apose a(direct)threat to …stifle creativitydiminish individual’s leisure time…spin out of controlcause(creat)tension and conflicts between…exert(have)detrimental/negative/adverseinfluence（impact）upon/onis markly incompatible with…與。不協(xié)調(diào)be afflicted with …deprive one of sthsth is the root cause of …be saturated with sthat the expense of ….be confronted with sthrun contrary to …erode the national identitypose a dilemma foris an vicious circlehamper(scientific)progressthere isa yawning gap betweenpose a devastating problemthe reputation is ruinedA is a complete failureThings can go wrong on a big scalesth is always faced with a difficult task /problemIt is impossible tohave(little)difficulties in doing

29pay the price for(fame)(pollution)is the price we pay for(overpopulated ,over industrialized planet)

people seem to fail to take into account the fact that ….好句！

lead to some unfavorable results

sacrifice ….for …

Thereis amajor concernovert heworldabout ….35 give rise to a bunch of familiar questions

36This is compounded by the fact that …

the problem of(information overloaded)exacerbated by(the growth …)

The problem , however , is complicated by the existence of dozens of..and by the fact that…..4 解決問題類

小模板：

1Evidence suggests that a key step is to develop a policy on ….,saying clearly(that..).2Other policies(such as。)can be taken to back up the policy.One helpful step is to … ,Another possibility is to improve …., so that ….It should be an addtion to the policy work ,not a substitute.The more effort put in and wider(the whole school)involvement ,the substantial the results are likely to be.give priority to sthshoulder the responsibility tocomply withimpose restrictions on..take …into account /considerationshould be increasingly focus on…rather than …what will make the most difference is …..The new study makes this point evenmore starkly 8 There are ways of dealing with the topic through …, ….and …..Three factors are involved in this change.新概念3+劍橋好句：Apparently,there is a good deal of truth in this idea./There is an element of truth in both agreements

2More importantly/significantly,there is still good evidence that …

3This is compounded by the fact that …由于。的事實(shí)，使。變得更糟

4Women,it is obvious, are freer than in the past.插入語has given rise to a bunch of familiar questions.It’s not A that are important ,but BProviding more parking area, in the long run ,has proved to be a practical way out in many large cities in the world.插入語Not only had the poor man been arrested ,but he had beensent to prison ,as wellIt has been estimated that …據(jù)估計(jì)Considering the amount she paid ,he was dear in more ways than one.非謂語

Fearing that she would never see Ratus againuse fewer materia resources and ,therefore,be much compatible with protecting the

environmentavoid squandering money on 避免浪費(fèi)錢在。上shoulder important responsibilities on major global issues

14These regions are fragile not just in terms of their ecology,but also in terms of the culture of their inhabitants.Climate change ,whatever its causes,is a direct threat to their way of life.插入語Cinema might, for example , have become pimarily a documentay form.for example放中間，好！But what happened was that it became ,overwhelmingly, a medium for tekking stories.插入語 28Unfortunately, they are the ones the organisation can least afford to lose.There is an abundance of evidence to support the motivational benefits that result from carefully matching people to jobs.an abundance of 大量的，好！Managers, must be sure ,therefore, that employees feel confident that their efforts can lead to performance goals.插入語

31To varying degree, we all have secrets which……

Instead of becoming a doctor , however ,he became a successful writer of detective stories.33 It seemed certain that

廣告Much as we may pride ourselves on our good taste,we are no longer free to choose the things we want ,for advertising exerts a subtle influence on us.35 In time ,it became an accepted fact that …

第二篇：雅思學(xué)術(shù)寫作小作文圖文對比 學(xué)生6分作文及老師批改

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1.作文題目

2.學(xué)生原文

The chart below shows male and female fitness membership between 1970 and 2000 The given chart provides the information about how many men and women keep healthy over three decades, from 1970 to 2000.It is interesting to notice that, from one thousand people in 1970, women fitness membership was almost constant at about two thousand people from 1975 to 1980, when it showed an exponential growth, rising to under three thousand after which it declined by about one thousand before another increase, ending at two thousand in 2000,whereas the number of man fitness membership doubled the women in 1970, despite some fluctuation, it fell back to the 1970 figure of women.With some decreases, the figure of men fitness membership reached at the peak in 1995 when it represented at five thousand.There was a remarkable fall in men who keep healthy from five thousand individuals to only one thousand.This decrease was particularly noticeable between 1995 and 2000, during which time the figure of men fitness membership was down five times.Similarly, there was still a gradual drop for women who keep healthy during that period, from around three thousand to two thousand.004km.cn

In conclusion, women who keep healthy had a remarkable increase , but there was a corresponding drops for men

3.老師批改

用詞不當(dāng)邏輯錯(cuò)誤語法錯(cuò)誤修改添加

The chart below shows male and female fitness membership between 1970 and 2000.(The bar chart illustrates changes in male and female fitness membership over a thirty – year period./ from 1970 to 2000.)(Overall, during the period, there were significant fluctuations in fitness membership among men than women.The number of male members reached a peak in 1995, and finally in 2000, the number reached to a similar pattern that was in 1970.)The given chart provides the information about how many men and women keep healthy over three decades, from 1970 to 2000.(overview,本段概述總結(jié)你從圖中讀到的最明顯的整體趨勢和信息。此段非常重要，)With some decreases, the figure of men fitness membership reached at the peak in 1995 when it represented at five thousand.(可以嘗試把一些有顯著差別數(shù)據(jù)做一些比較，比如男女生的情況，The number of male members stood at just over 2000 while there were only 1000 female.After the following five years, it increased to 4000, which was doubled in 1975.Then there was a drop until 1995, peaking around 5000 in total.However,)there was a remarkable fall in men who keep healthy from five thousand individuals to only one thousand.This decrease was particularly noticeable between 1995 and 2000, during which time the figure of men fitness membership was down five times.Similarly, there was still a gradual drop for women who keep healthy during that period, from around three thousand to two thousand.It is interesting to notice that, from one thousand people in 1970,(The figures for women/ female membership began lower than 1000 in 1970, doubled by 1975, and then fluctuated between 2000 and 3000 over the period.)women fitness membership was almost constant at about two thousand people from 1975 to 1980, when it showed an exponential growth, rising to under three thousand after which it declined by about one thousand before another increase, ending at two thousand in 2000,whereas the number of man fitness membership doubled the women in 1970, despite some fluctuation, it fell back to the 1970 figure of women.（數(shù)據(jù)很全，但是可以在總結(jié)性強(qiáng)一點(diǎn)。）

In conclusion, women who keep healthy had a remarkable increase , but there was a corresponding drops for men。（如果寫過overview，這一段可以省略。）

4.作文總評 批改： 令狐敬老師

本次批改嚴(yán)格按照IELTS大作文評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)進(jìn)行。IELTS小作文評分項(xiàng)：TA(主要信息呈現(xiàn)度), CC(連貫性及一致性), GRA(語法范圍及精準(zhǔn)度), LR(詞匯資源)。文末會進(jìn)行總評及打分。004km.cn

總評 6（TA 6 CC 6 LR6.0 GRA5.5）

1.主要的趨勢基本表達(dá)清晰，但是數(shù)據(jù)也很充足。2.可以多一些明顯區(qū)別的比較，學(xué)會更合理的分段。3.詞匯上變化也比較多，很好。

4.可以再嘗試多用一些從句，來短時(shí)間提升語法分?jǐn)?shù)。

一些建議：這一段概述可以放到第二段，作為overview，這會給考官一個(gè)對圖像的整體印象，也有助于對你在后面兩細(xì)節(jié)段的理解，文章整體會更加有邏輯性。所以可以使用以下結(jié)構(gòu)：

1.Introduce the graph（首段介紹圖像，最好不要借用考官的題目原詞。）2.Give an overview（把主要的趨勢，總體趨勢：不要給出具體的數(shù)字信息）

3.Give the detail（細(xì)節(jié)討論時(shí)，先從最大的趨勢寫，比如這里男性的變化更大，所以先寫male 的情況。在這個(gè)主體段落里具體給出你的數(shù)據(jù)或者趨勢變化等。）

（提示： 在detail段落里，重要的市如何根據(jù)不同的或者相同的變化分段。）

5.作文范文：

The chart shows male and female fitness membership over a thirty-year period.The vertical axis represents the number of members.The horizontal axis represents the period from 1970 to 2000.Overall, the chart indicates that there were greater fluctuations in fitness membership among men than among women.The number of male members started the period at just over two thousand and reached highs of four thousand in 1975 and five thousand around 1995.The lowest rates were in 1985 and more recently in 2000 when the rate dipped as low as one thousand.Female fitness membership began lower at one thousand, doubled by 1975, and then fluctuated between two and three thousand for the remainder of the period.When male rates were at their lowest, female rates were higher.This was particularly true in 1985 when over three thousand women held fitness membership.In brief, there were marked differences in rates of male and female fitness memberships in the period covered.(161 words)