My Mother

In my eyes, my mother is quite beautiful.She is tall and of medium build.She has short curly hair.She has a round face with big eyes.She is forty-six years old now.She likes watching TV and playing sports.I think my mother is watching her favorite TV shows now.She also likes going shopping.She is a worker in a clothes factory.And She goes to work by car.She is really kind but sometimes kind of strict with me.Because she makes many family rules for me.For example, I can’t eat in the bedroom, I can’t go out on school nights and so on.But now I know these rules are good for me.All in all, I love my mother very much!

評語:

I appreciate your handwriting.The composition is well-organized and perfectly-expanded.The first para.makes a good beginning and the last para.makes a perfect ending.All points have been covered.I am glad to see the concluding sentence in your last para.It’s better to pay attention to the relationship between sentences.I’m expecting greater progress from you.Come on.學(xué)校：蘆溪鎮(zhèn)中學(xué)

班級：704班

姓名：鮑優(yōu)

指導(dǎo)老師：黎志琛