第一篇：2011年上海高考英語(yǔ)作文解析

2011年上海高考英語(yǔ)作文解析

一、2011年上海高考英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作中關(guān)于聯(lián)合國(guó)基金會(huì)組織背景

聯(lián)合國(guó)兒童基金會(huì)（United Nations International Children's Emergency Fund, 簡(jiǎn)稱(chēng)UNICEF），原名聯(lián)合國(guó)國(guó)際兒童緊急救助基金會(huì)，于1946年12月11日創(chuàng)建，其目的是滿(mǎn)足戰(zhàn)后歐洲與中國(guó)兒童的緊急需求。1950年起，它的工作擴(kuò)展到滿(mǎn)足全球所有發(fā)展中國(guó)家兒童和母親的長(zhǎng)期需求。1953年，UNICEF成為聯(lián)合國(guó)系統(tǒng)的永久成員，隸屬聯(lián)合國(guó)系統(tǒng)，受聯(lián)合國(guó)大會(huì)的委托，致力于實(shí)現(xiàn)全球各國(guó)兒童的生存、發(fā)展、受保護(hù)和參與的權(quán)利。

United Nations Children's Fund was created by the United Nations General Assemblyon December 11, 1946, to provide emergency food and healthcare to children in countries that had been devastated by World War II.In 1953, UNICEF became a permanent part of the United Nations System and its name was shortened from the original United

Nations International Children's Emergency Fund but it has continued to be known by the popular acronym based on this old name.Headquartered in New York City, UNICEF

provides long-term humanitarian and developmental assistance to children and mothers in developing countries.It is one of the members of the United Nations Development Group and its Executive Committee.UNICEF relies on contributions from governments and private donors and UNICEF's total income for 2006 was $2,781,000,000.Governments contribute two thirds of the

organization's resources;private groups and some 6 million individuals contribute the rest through the National Committees.UNICEF's programs emphasize developing

community-level services to promote the health and well-being of children.UNICEF was awarded the Nobel Peace Prize in 1965 and the Prince of Asturias Award of Concord in 2006.二、2011年上海高考英語(yǔ)作文申請(qǐng)信件一些經(jīng)典句式

本次2011年高考上海英語(yǔ)卷作文體裁是寫(xiě)一封申請(qǐng)信，這里給大家補(bǔ)充一些寫(xiě)申請(qǐng)信常用的句式

（一）開(kāi)頭常用句式

1.Your advertisement made me unable to wait to write this application for the post because I think I have the qualifications you are seeking.2.I am writing to apply for the advertised post of … 3.I would like to apply for admission to your college.4.I would like to further my studies in … department of your honored university.5.I would like to apply for the graduate program of … in your university.6.I would like to apply for the scholarship that your department offers to students from other countries.7.I am writing to you in the hope that I may obtain an opportunity to further my study in … towards a master’s degree in your university.8.I would like to apply for admission to your graduate school of..（二）結(jié)尾常用句式

1.Looking forward to your favorable reply.2.I hope you will kindly send me an application form.3.Thank you for considering my application and I am looking forward to hearing from you.4.I greatly appreciate any of your favorable consideration of my application.5.I would be very grateful if you would consider my application and could send me some information about the scholarship.6.Thank you for your consideration.I look forward to your reply.7.I would be grateful if you can grant me an early reply about the result of my application.8.If any scholarships are available, I would appreciate it if you would send me the necessary application forms.9.I hope my academic background will meet your general entrance requirements for graduate study.（三）其他常用句式

1.I have obtained my BA in … from University.2.I am a senior student now and expect my graduation next summer from … University.3.I major in … and did some research work during my undergraduate years.4．Since graduation I have been working in … which specializes in… 5.Now I am particularly interested in…

6.Would you please send me the necessary application forms and any further details about … 7.I hope to further continue my research on …

8.Enclosed please find two letters of recommendation and my transcript.9.I am interested in your MA programs in …, and wish to enter this program.My background is as follows: …

（四）求職申請(qǐng)信常用句型

1.In reply to your advertisement in ~,I respectfully offer my services for the situation.2.With reference to your advertisement in ~ for a / an ~,I offer myself for the post.3.Please consider me an applicant for the position which you advertised in ~.4.Having noticed the enclosed advertisement in ~,I wish to apply for the position referred to.5.In answer to your advertisement in ~ for a ~,I wish to tender my services.6.Your advertisement for a ~ in ~ has interested me.I feel I can fill that position.7.Shall you need an experienced ~ for your ~ next summer？

8.I have been for over five years in the employment of a / an ~ company 9.I have been in the business for the last ~ years, and worked as the director of the…department.10.I've had ~ years' experience with a company as a ~.11.For the last ~ years, I have been and still am a / an ~.12.I'm ~ years of age, female / male, and have had ~ years' experience in a limited company's ~ office 13.I should be very glad to have a personal interview and can furnish references if desired.14.If you desire an interview, I shall be most happy to call in person, on any day and at any time you may appoint.15.Should you think favorably of my application, kindly grant me an interview.16.I trust that you'll give this application your favorable consideration.17.Should you give me a trial, I'll do my utmost to afford you every satisfaction.三、2011年上海高考英語(yǔ)作文參考范文 2011上海高考英語(yǔ)題目：

若你是明啟中學(xué)李明，想申請(qǐng)一個(gè)扶貧項(xiàng)目，幫助貧困地區(qū)的兒童。根據(jù)以下啟示寫(xiě)一封申請(qǐng)信。啟示：國(guó)際兒童基金會(huì)將資助中學(xué)生開(kāi)展扶貧項(xiàng)目，以幫助貧困地區(qū)的兒童。申請(qǐng)成功者將獲得項(xiàng)目經(jīng)費(fèi)2000元。有意者請(qǐng)來(lái)信告知。信中請(qǐng)包括：

1． 你個(gè)人基本情況 2． 你對(duì)申請(qǐng)項(xiàng)目具體設(shè)想

3． 項(xiàng)目經(jīng)費(fèi)使用情況

這類(lèi)作文在篇章布局上可以用最常見(jiàn)的“總-分-總”的框架。首先，總起全文，介紹自己并說(shuō)明得知國(guó)際兒童基金將開(kāi)展扶貧項(xiàng)目，非常想申請(qǐng)此項(xiàng)目。接著，第二段說(shuō)明自己的想法和具體的方案。這里提供兩個(gè)方案供大家參考：

1、買(mǎi)文具，日常生活用品。

2、買(mǎi)教科書(shū)，或者號(hào)召同學(xué)募捐舊書(shū)，等等。最后，總結(jié)全文，表達(dá)自己非常熱切地想申請(qǐng)到這個(gè)扶貧項(xiàng)目。望國(guó)際兒童基金能盡早回復(fù)。范文一：

Dear Sirs，Hello!I’m Li Ming, a student from Mingqi High School of Shanghai.As I’ve always been interested in charity, I’m writing to you in the hope that I could be given the 2,000-yuan fund to carry out my project to help children in poverty-stricken areas.My poverty-relief program is divided into three parts.In the initial stage, I’ll try to purchase textbooks for subjects such as English and Maths.Given that new books are usually expensive, I’ll be on the look-out for good-quality second-hand books.The second stage of my program is to recruit high school students who have a strong desire to help pupils in poor areas.Surely they should be armed with relative knowledge to be qualified teachers.Lastly, we will set out for primary schools, which are selected and contacted in advance, to carry out our program.As to how to allocate the money, I’d like to use 1,000 for textbooks, and the rest to pay for the travelling fee of volunteers.I am looking forward to your reply, thanks!

Yours，Li Ming

亮點(diǎn)詞組句型歸納:

1.be interested in 對(duì)…感興趣

2.write to someone in the hope that 寫(xiě)信給某人以期（實(shí)現(xiàn)某愿望）

3.carry out 履行

4.poverty-stricken 貧困的 5.poverty-relief 扶貧的 6.given 考慮到

7.be on the look-out for 尋找

8.meet more demands 滿(mǎn)足更多的需求

9.recruit 招募

10.qualified 有資格的 11.set out for 出發(fā)前往

12.in advance 提前

13.allocate 分配 范文二：

Dear Sirs，My name is Li Ming and I’m a student from Mingqi High School.As I have grownup in the city, lending a hand to my rural peer group has always been my dream.I’m writing to apply for the poverty-relief program launched by the International Children

Fund that I have heard about recently.In fact, there are still a large number of school-age children who have no access to good education in the undeveloped regions of our country.So, I sincerely hope that I cando something to make a difference by making full use of your program.If I can get the supporting money, first, I will use some parts of it to buy the textbooks they need.Since the fund is limited, I will try to buy some second-hand reading materials for their

free-time reading.Besides, I have to keep a small sum of money in order to pay the

postal charges.Last but not least, I will feel honored if I can get the fund to start the poverty-reliefprogram in our country and I will try my best to use the fund.I’m looking forward to your reply!

Yours, Li Ming 亮點(diǎn)詞組句型歸納: 1.lend a hand to 幫助…

2.apply for 申請(qǐng)

3.the poverty-relief program launched by the International Children Fund由國(guó)際兒童基金會(huì)發(fā)起的扶貧項(xiàng)目

4.school-age children 學(xué)齡兒童

5.have no access to good education接受不到良好的教育

6.undeveloped region 欠發(fā)達(dá)地區(qū)

7.make a difference 有影響

8.make use of 利用

9.a small sum of money 一小筆錢(qián)

10.postal charge 郵費(fèi)

四、2011年上海英語(yǔ)高考寫(xiě)作與2005年上海春季高考英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作

2011年上海高考英語(yǔ)卷考察是寫(xiě)一份申請(qǐng)扶貧項(xiàng)目的申請(qǐng)信，翻閱往年高考上海英語(yǔ)試卷，在2005年春季高考中也考察到申請(qǐng)信，但事隔6年，難度系數(shù)也陡然上升。其實(shí)09年秋季高考也是申請(qǐng)信，但依然以理由型議論文為考核重點(diǎn)（06-10年連續(xù)四年考察的都是理由型的議論文）。

下文為05年春季的作文題目以及2篇范文

Directions: write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese.你叫李宏，你校在為一批來(lái)自加拿大的交流學(xué)生（exchange student）征詢(xún)?yōu)槠趦芍艿淖∷藜彝ァＤ阌幸馍暾?qǐng)，寫(xiě)封信說(shuō)明你申請(qǐng)的理由（包括所具備的條件）。

范文一：

Dear Mr./ Ms，I have heard that our school is seeking for some home stays for exchange students who came from Canada.I guess my family meets the requirements and I would love to apply for it.My house is close to the Central Business District.From my house, one can enjoy agood bird view of our city, as it is on the 42nd floor.What’s more, I will arrange

sightseeing for the exchange students to have a deep impression of our cultural deposits and great development.My father works in a foreign-owned enterprise and my mother is an English teacher.In view of this, our family will have no trouble communicating with them.Besides, we even have a guest room in our house, which allows the exchange student to have his or her own space.In conclusion, I definitely have the confidence of being a wonderful host to the

exchange students.It is a great honor if I get this chance to show them the culture and modernization of our city and to leave them a deep impression of hospitality.Yours，Li Hong 范文二：

Dear Headmaster，I am writing to you in the hope of attaining the opportunity of accommodating exchange students from Canada.I think my family can provide them with decent conditions and my reasons are as follows.Firstly, my family lives in the downtown of Shanghai.Therefore, we have easy access to all kinds of transportations, such as subway, bus, and plane, thereby greatly facilitate the exchange students’ traveling.Secondly, my parents are local Shanghai residents, indicating that they can afford advantageous advices for foreign students on where to go and what to do during their fortnight-stay, thus enabling them to make full use of their sojourn.Last but not least, my family is living in a large detached house, so we have sufficient vacant rooms for them, which I believe is most desired for tired travelers who’ve gone all the way from Canada to China.Therefore, I am confident to provide the exchange students with comfortable living conditions.And I would really appreciate if you could give me the chance.Thank you for reading my application.Yours，Li Hong

第二篇：2013上海高考英語(yǔ)作文參考

上海博物館擬舉辦一次名畫(huà)展，現(xiàn)就展出場(chǎng)所（博物館還是社區(qū)圖書(shū)館）征集公眾意見(jiàn)，假設(shè)你是王敏，給上海博物館寫(xiě)一封信表達(dá)你的想法。你的信必須滿(mǎn)足以下要求：

1.簡(jiǎn)述你寫(xiě)信的目的及你對(duì)場(chǎng)所的選擇；

2.說(shuō)明你的理由（從便利性、專(zhuān)業(yè)性等方面對(duì)這兩個(gè)場(chǎng)所進(jìn)行對(duì)比）。

Dear exhibition organizers of Shanghai Museum:

My name is Wang Min, a student studying at Shanghai XX High School.I am writing to offer my views on the place where the exhibition should be held.As far as I am concerned, the painting exhibition should without doubt take place in Shanghai Museum instead of the community library.The reasons why I hold that opinion are as follows.First, in terms of convenience, Shanghai Museum is a much better choice for visitors who may not know well about Shanghai.Located near People’s Square, the best-known transportation center and tourist site in Shanghai, it is absolutely easy for anyone to find it.Considering that it is an exhibition of famous paintings that will attract guests from all over the world, the broad streets will serve as another advantage to provide easy access and sufficient parking space.Another advantage that Shanghai Museum has over the community library is that it has considerable experience in organizing such exhibitions.It is quite common for Shanghai Museum to be in charge of a wide range of activities.We should hand a task to a professional rather than an amateur and Shanghai Museum is just the professional who will fulfill the task skillfully.Modest as my reasoning may seem, I believe it makes sense.I hope you will include my views when you make the decision.Thank you!

Yours Sincerely

Wang Min

第三篇：高考英語(yǔ)作文經(jīng)典解析（范文）

高考英語(yǔ)作文模板經(jīng)典解析

高考英語(yǔ)作文模版：對(duì)比觀點(diǎn)題型

（1）要求論述兩個(gè)對(duì)立的觀點(diǎn)并給出自己的看法。

1． 有一些人認(rèn)為……2． 另一些人認(rèn)為……3． 我的看法……

The topic of ①-----------------（主題）is becoming more and more popular recently.There are two sides of opinions of it.Some people say A is their favorite.They hold their view for the reason of ②-----------------（支持A的理由一）What is more, ③-------------理由二).Moreover, ④---------------(理由三).While others think that B is a better choice in the following three reasons.Firstly,-----------------(支持B的理由一).Secondly(besides),⑥------------------（理由二）.Thirdly(finally),⑦------------------(理由三).From my point of view, I think ⑧----------------（我的觀點(diǎn)）.The reason is that ⑨--------------------(原因).As a matter of fact, there are some other reasons to explain my choice.For me, the former is surely a wise choice.（2）給出一個(gè)觀點(diǎn)，要求考生反對(duì)這一觀點(diǎn)

Some people believe that ①----------------（觀點(diǎn)一）.For example, they think ②-----------------（舉例說(shuō)明）．And it will bring them ③-----------------(為他們帶來(lái)的好處).In my opinion, I never think this reason can be the point.For one thing,④-------------(我不同意該看法的理由一).For another thing, ⑤-----------------(反對(duì)的理由之二)．

Form all what I have said, I agree to the thought that ⑥------------------(我對(duì)文章所討論主題的看法)．

高考英語(yǔ)作文模板：闡述主題題型

要求從一句話(huà)或一個(gè)主題出發(fā)，按照提綱的要求進(jìn)行論述．

1． 闡述名言或主題所蘊(yùn)涵的意義．2． 分析并舉例使其更充實(shí)．

The good old proverb----------------（名言或諺語(yǔ)）reminds us that----------------(釋義).Indeed, we can learn many things form it.First of all,-----------------(理由一).For example,-------------------(舉例說(shuō)明).Secondly,----------------(理由二).Another case is that---------------(舉例說(shuō)明).Furthermore ,------------------(理由三)．

In my opinion,----------------(我的觀點(diǎn)).In short, whatever you do, please remember the say------A.If you understand it and apply it to your study or work, you”ll necessarily benefit a lot from it.高考英語(yǔ)作文模板：解決方法題型

要求考生列舉出解決問(wèn)題的多種途徑

1．問(wèn)題現(xiàn)狀2．怎樣解決(解決方案的優(yōu)缺點(diǎn))

In recent days, we have to face the problem-----A, which is becoming more and more serious.First,------------(說(shuō)明Ａ的現(xiàn)狀)．Second,---------------(舉例進(jìn)一步說(shuō)明現(xiàn)狀)

Confronted with A, we should take a series of effective measures to cope with the situation.For one thing,---------------(解決方法一).For another-------------(解決方法二).Finally,--------------(解決方法三).Personally, I believe that-------------(我的解決方法).Consequently, I’m confident that a bright future is awaiting us because--------------(帶來(lái)的好處).高考英語(yǔ)作文模板：說(shuō)明利弊題型

這種題型往往要求先說(shuō)明一下現(xiàn)狀，再對(duì)比事物本身的利弊，有時(shí)也會(huì)單從一個(gè)角度（利或弊）出發(fā)，最后往往要求考生表明自己的態(tài)度（或?qū)κ挛锴熬疤岢鲱A(yù)測(cè)）

1．說(shuō)明事物現(xiàn)狀2．事物本身的優(yōu)缺點(diǎn)（或一方面）3．你對(duì)現(xiàn)狀（或前景）的看法 Nowadays many people preferAbecause it has a significant role in our daily life.Generally, its advantages can be seen as follows.First----------------(Ａ的優(yōu)點(diǎn)之一).Besides-------------------（Ａ的優(yōu)點(diǎn)之二）.But every coin has two sides.The negative aspects are also apparent.One of the important disadvantages is that----------------(Ａ的第一個(gè)缺點(diǎn))．To make matters worse,------------------(Ａ的第二個(gè)缺點(diǎn))．

Through the above analysis, I believe that the positive aspects overweigh the negative ones.Therefore, I would like to---------------(我的看法)．

(From the comparison between these positive and negative effects of A, we should take it reasonably and do it according to the circumstances we are in.Only by this way,---------------(對(duì)前景的預(yù)測(cè)）

高考英語(yǔ)作文模板：議論文的框架

(1)不同觀點(diǎn)列舉型（選擇型）

There is a widespread concern over the issue that __作文題目_____.But it is well known that the opinion concerning this hot topic varies from person to person.A majority of people think that _ 觀點(diǎn)一________.In their views there are 2 factors contributing to this attitude as follows: in the first place, ___原因一_______.Furthermore, in the second place, ___原因二_____.So it goes without saying that ___觀點(diǎn)一_____.People, however, differ in their opinions on this matter.Some people hold the idea that ___觀點(diǎn)二_______.In their point of view, on the one hand，___原因一_______.On the other hand, ____原因二_____.Therefore, there is no doubt that ___觀點(diǎn)二______.As far as I am concerned, I firmly support the view that __觀點(diǎn)一或二______.It is not only because ________, but also because _________.The more _______, the more ________.（2）利弊型的議論文

Nowadays, there is a widespread concern over(the issue that)___作文題目______.In fact, there are both advantages and disadvantages in __題目議題_____.Generally speaking, it is widely believed there are several positive aspects as follows.Firstly, ___優(yōu)點(diǎn)一___.And secondly ___優(yōu)點(diǎn)二_____.Just As a popular saying goes, “every coin has two sides”, __討論議題______ is no exception, and in another word, it still has negative aspects.To begin with, ___缺點(diǎn)一______.In addition, ____缺點(diǎn)二______.To sum up, we should try to bring the advantages of __討論議題____ into full play, and reduce the disadvantages to the minimum at the same time.In that case, we will definitely make a better use of the ____討論議題___.(3)答題性議論文

Currently, there is a widespread concern over(the issue that)__作文題目_______.It is really an important concern to every one of us.As a result, we must spare no efforts to take some measures to solve this problem.As we know that there are many steps which can be taken to undo this problem.First of all, __途

徑一_.In addition, another way contributing to success of the solving problem is _途徑二_____.Above all, to solve the problem of ___作文題目______, we should find a number of various ways.But as far as I am concerned, I would prefer to solve the problem in this way, that is to say, ____方法_____.(4)諺語(yǔ)警句性議論文

It is well know to us that the proverb: “ ___諺語(yǔ)_______” has a profound significance and value not only in our job but also in our study.It means ____諺語(yǔ)的含義_______.The saying can be illustrated through a series of examples as follows.(also theoretically)

A case in point is ___例子一______.Therefore, it is goes without saying that it is of great of importance to practice the proverb ____諺語(yǔ)_____.With the rapid development of science and technology in China, an increasing number of people come to realize that it is also of practical use to stick to the saying: ____諺語(yǔ)_____.The more we are aware of the significance of this famous saying, the more benefits we will get in our daily study and job..高考英語(yǔ)作文模板：圖表作文的框架

as is shown/indicated/illustrated by the figure/percentage in the table(graph/picture/pie/chart), ___作文題目的議題_____ has been on rise/ decrease(goesup/increases/drops/decreases),significantly/dramatically/steadily rising/decreasing from______ in _______ to ______ in _____.From the sharp/marked decline/ rise in the chart, it goes without saying that ________.There are at least two good reasons accounting for ______.On the one hand, ________.On the other hand, _______ is due to the fact that ________.In addition, ________ is

書(shū)寫(xiě)高考英語(yǔ)作文的四步流程

如果你曾經(jīng)為英語(yǔ)作文日日傷心以淚洗面，如果你曾經(jīng)面對(duì)作文題目苦思冥想頭腦里天馬行空卻不知如何動(dòng)筆，如果你看到發(fā)下來(lái)的卷子上英語(yǔ)作文上犯的一些小錯(cuò)誤后感到痛心疾首大呼懊惱，那么這套流程對(duì)你來(lái)說(shuō)應(yīng)該有一定參考價(jià)值。

第一步，審題。

拿到題目后，手中拿鉛筆，手腦眼嘴并用，開(kāi)始審題?？搭}目的要求是什么，要點(diǎn)是什么，特殊要求是什么。譬如你是叫李華，還是隨便一個(gè)名字？ 要議論文還是記敘文？對(duì)分幾段寫(xiě)有無(wú)要求？等等。諸如此類(lèi)的硬性要求信息，都最好用鉛筆劃下來(lái)，以免出錯(cuò)，也許你一開(kāi)始會(huì)記得，可隨著時(shí)間的流逝，你會(huì)不會(huì)因緊張而遺忘這些信息呢？還是小心為妙。邊看最好邊張嘴默讀，這樣就不會(huì)遺漏或忽略任何一個(gè)字了。

第二步，草稿。

有的同學(xué)怕出錯(cuò)，全文都打草稿再謄寫(xiě)，我姑且認(rèn)為不太可取，畢竟考場(chǎng)時(shí)間寶貴，即使我有四十分鐘時(shí)間寫(xiě)作文也不敢貿(mào)然這么做，更何況考場(chǎng)時(shí)我們留給作文的時(shí)間往往一再被壓縮。有的同學(xué)不打草稿，我認(rèn)為更不太可取。一來(lái)容易出錯(cuò)，二來(lái)邊寫(xiě)邊想思維不連貫，即使思維連貫也無(wú)法審詞酌句，展現(xiàn)自己最好的一面，容易后悔。

草稿怎么打？

1.結(jié)構(gòu)就是你打算分幾段寫(xiě)，每段都寫(xiě)什么？哪段轉(zhuǎn)哪段承哪段起合？心里都要是有譜的。

2.關(guān)鍵詞：結(jié)構(gòu)擬定后，迅速在草稿紙上寫(xiě)下自己這篇作文可能用到的一些關(guān)鍵詞。包括一些漂亮的詞和自己可能會(huì)忘記的詞。主要是動(dòng)詞和名詞。

譬如一省作文題： 假設(shè)你的名字是李華，亞洲冬季運(yùn)動(dòng)會(huì)將在你居住的地方舉辦，現(xiàn)招募志愿者。你希望成為志愿者。申請(qǐng)信的格式已經(jīng)寫(xiě)好了，你直接寫(xiě)內(nèi)容就可以。你的個(gè)人情

況：年齡性別學(xué)歷，個(gè)人條件。英語(yǔ)好，愛(ài)好體育，擅長(zhǎng)交際，樂(lè)于助人。承諾提供最佳服務(wù)。

關(guān)鍵詞就是學(xué)歷、愛(ài)好、擅長(zhǎng)、樂(lè)于、承諾，和你對(duì)這篇作文初步構(gòu)思時(shí)想到的一些詞。先把這些詞（指詞的英文表達(dá)）寫(xiě)在紙上。有一些詞的拼寫(xiě)，譬如學(xué)歷，可能你本身就記得不是特別清楚，這時(shí)一定要在開(kāi)始寫(xiě)作文前先把它寫(xiě)下來(lái)，以免一會(huì)因干擾而遺忘。

可能看到聰明這個(gè)關(guān)鍵詞時(shí)，你最初寫(xiě)下的往往是clever，再仔細(xì)想想，你是不是又想到了smart, deligient好多詞，挑個(gè)漂亮和合適的用吧。再比如轉(zhuǎn)折，你寫(xiě)了but，這會(huì)再想想，是不是又有一堆表示轉(zhuǎn)折的詞在你腦里打轉(zhuǎn)呢？挑一個(gè)吧。千萬(wàn)別用but.3.句式：詞寫(xiě)下來(lái)了，其實(shí)你構(gòu)建這篇作文的建筑材料就到位了，下步就是要把它們蓋成漂亮的作文。先用最普通的陳述句把它們?cè)陬^腦中過(guò)一遍，然后看看都能改成什么句式。能不能把一句陳述句改成問(wèn)句？能不能用上一個(gè)雙重否定句？能不能用一個(gè)主語(yǔ)從句套定語(yǔ)從句的長(zhǎng)句？能不能用一個(gè)插入語(yǔ)？等等。把你高中三年的英語(yǔ)積累展示出來(lái)。在草稿紙上同樣標(biāo)注。

三．正式寫(xiě)。

這樣的草稿打完后，就要快快寫(xiě)了。注意，英語(yǔ)作文的卷面簡(jiǎn)直太重要了，一定要把字寫(xiě)整齊，寫(xiě)大。沒(méi)有把握的詞和句子不用。別忘了遵守你最初用鉛筆劃下的題目的規(guī)定。

四．檢查。

注意，最最重要的一步來(lái)了。盡管很小心，可是我們寫(xiě)英語(yǔ)作文還是會(huì)犯下很多錯(cuò)誤。單詞拼寫(xiě)的，大小寫(xiě)的，等等。這些錯(cuò)誤會(huì)極大破壞我們?cè)陂喚砝蠋熜哪恐械男蜗螅欢ㄒ獔?jiān)決誓死消滅。即使時(shí)間再緊，請(qǐng)務(wù)必留下1——2分鐘檢查作文的時(shí)間，消除隱性錯(cuò)誤。需要說(shuō)明的是，英語(yǔ)的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾是最關(guān)鍵的，尤其是開(kāi)頭?；旧?，不跑題，遵守題目要求，一個(gè)漂亮的開(kāi)頭，一個(gè)還過(guò)得去的結(jié)尾，2-3個(gè)高級(jí)詞匯，1-2個(gè)漂亮的句子，加上整齊的字跡，作文的分就不會(huì)低了哦。所以，精心為你的作文想個(gè)漂亮的開(kāi)頭吧。

第四篇：上海高考英語(yǔ)滿(mǎn)分作文匯總

June 8th

Dear Haiqing，I hear you are very unhappy these days because your parents can‘t afford to buy you some brand-name shoes and garments you like very much.And I write you this letter to share with you what I think about this matter.To begin with，beauty is just skin deep.Don‘t you think it silly to pay so much attention to your appearance？ He is a shallow person who judges others by their appearance； in the same sense，he is a shallow person who thinks that a brand-name garment can add to his glamour.So please，just forget about those brand-name things.What really matters is not whether you wear brand-name shoes or garments but whether your clothes fit you.As a student，you have to wear the school uniform on the weekdays and to be honest，you look very smart in it.Then why do you have to bother to buy the expensive brand-name things？

Secondly，I know your parents are both average workers.Hard as they work，they don‘t earn much.Despite this，they do their best to give you a lot of things on demand.Look at the callus on their hands and wrinkles on their faces，how can you have the heart to ask for more than they can afford，which will surely break their hearts？ Remember，parents don’t owe us expensive summer camps； they don‘t owe us Sony Walkman； nor do they owe us Nike shoes，If you really want those fancy things，you should take a part-time job to contribute to their purchase rather than ask your parents for money to add to their already heavy burden.Don’t you think so？

Thirdly，we have such a wide variety of things available these days which are both nice and inexpensive.What‘s the point of paying much more for those brand-name things that are not much better？ My friend，take my advice，and you’ll be a wiser consumer as well as a more considerate child to your parents.Poverty，sometimes，is a good thing.It can test a person‘s character and it makes a man out of a boy faster than anything else.Keep working hard，and you are bound to be able to afford those things in the near future.Now you may as well focus on your study.Anyway，wouldn’t it be funny for a would-be achiever to be so preoccupied with brand-name things all day long？

Keep in touch.Yours

Huangping 459 2012 As is vividly described in the picture, the foreign pupils are raising their hands, eager to answer the teacher’s questions.Judging from the smiles on their faces, they must be very happy, relaxed and free.This reminds me of my primary school days, which was totally different from theirs.As far as I can remember, my teachers as well as my parents always told me to keep quiet and sit straight in class, not to do anything without the

teacher’s permission, including smiling and speaking out our viewpoints freely.I did as I was told.Frankly speaking, I’m fond of the atmosphere in western classes.But on the other hand, I still treasure the strict discipline learned when I was young.As a matter of fact, I think it is different cultures that make different classes and also different students.I am glad to see that the education of China is undergoing a significant reform, which aims to reduce students’ learning burden and encourage students to be more imaginative and creative.I firmly believe that in the near future more and more Chinese students will enjoy a free and open classroom atmosphere.192 2.As is described in the picture, a group of foreign students are raising their hands to give answers to the question in a joyful and active way.The purpose of the picture is to show us how active the class performance is in the foreign country.Compared with the class performance in local China, the difference is quite obvious.We Chinese students stay quiet in class, keep taking notes and listen to what teacher is talking in a careful way.I ask myself what causes lead to the phenomenon? Why class performance of Chinese students is quite different from that of foreign students? Possible reasons can be listed as follows.Most important of all, education system in China is the key reason.The first day we become the primary student, our teachers tell us to obey the rules in class.We put our hands back and stay quiet in class.Lecture-model teaching is the traditional way in Chinese class.Teacher is the leading actor or actress and student is always the supporting roles.Gradually we get into the habit of staying quiet in class and lose the ability to raise questions and give the answers.The second point to be mentioned is that Chinese students hold different attitudes toward study.In our minds, we always think what we should learn instead of how we should learn knowledge in a smart way.We behave us as a passive listener, but foreign student act as a active learner.As a saying goes, it is better to teach to fish rather than give a fish.Taking what has been discussed above into account, there is no doubt that we need to think it over whether we are supposed to be a learner or a quiet listener.193 2009 ?

It is said that a summer camp is to be held by your school and a few courses are available to choose from.I am interested in gardening, in that I believe it features my character and personal benefits.?

During the learning period, I expect to gain some unexpected knowledge.A radical technique I’d like to obtain is to know how to tell difference species of plants and flowers apart.This helps me to have a clearer outlook of those in my garden.Furthermore, the proper cutting time and frequency to water are some other skills I want to learn.A little knowledge concerning choosing suitable soil or reasonable positions will also be a good choice.? The main reason why I choose gardening is that I want to help my parents with their work in the domestic garden.In addition, I find that we students generally lack the knowledge of gardening, missing a chance to have a word with nature, so that knowing the surroundings is imperative.Last but not least, by attending the courses, I will have a meaningful summer vacation, and drowning myself between plants will by all means add a brilliant touch to my life.200 2008 1.A group dancing competition will be held in our school and the monitor calls on everybody to take an active part in it.While most of my classmates are still hesitating whether to participate, I have said yes to our monitor with great pleasure.Generally speaking, there are two reasons for my decision.First, it is a good opportunity for me to relax myself, which will enable me to study more efficiently.All work and no play makes Jack a dull boy, so goes the saying, which clearly shows us the importance of relaxation.Besides, I think I am a good dancer after learning dance for more than five years.Participating in the contest will be a golden chance for me to show my dancing skills and make some contributions to the class.For the two reasons mentioned above, it is no surprise that I have such a strong enthusiasm for the group dancing competition.155

2.Today the monitor calls on everybody to take an active part in the group dancing competition which will be held in a couple of days in our school.But after some careful consideration, I have decided not to participate.There are a number of reasons for my decision.First and foremost, as the College Entrance Exam is just around the corner, study is the top priority for me.Participating in the group dancing competition has to give way because it might take me too much time.What’s more, without any experience of dancing, I don’t think I can be a good dancing partner.I am afraid my poor dancing skills will probably spoil the performance of the whole class.In this case, it’s better for me to be a spectator cheering for my classmates.For these reasons, it seems more appropriate for me to watch the competition than to dance myself.151 2007

A Present for Father’s Day

The Father’s Day will come soon.and I want to give my Dad a present.That is a VIP card of a health club.When I was a little boy, Dad worked hard as a teacher.During term, Mother and I sometimes accompanied Dad in his office till a late hour.From then on, I understood that Dad worked with great effort.There are still too many precious memories which I’ll cherish in my heart.And I want to give this present to express my thanks to him.Time flies and I’m 18 now.As I grow up, Father is getting older.He is now still diving into piles of books.With the health club membership, I hope that he will set aside some time to do more exercise.I think that he will relax in the health club and make more friends as well.150 2.It is widely acknowledged that a good present is of great value to a person and even prone to change his or her life.As for me , one of the most impressive presents I have given to my friends is a watch which I have used for three years.The watch was given to Tom, who is one of my best friends.Diligent and warm-hearted as he is , he sometimes has no sense of time, which causes him to be late for many things and leads to some trouble in work.By giving him such a watch, I hope he will pay more attention to punctuality, which may bring him more credibility in life and higher efficiency in both work and study.Besides, he used to tell me that he might feel lonely in the new environment after leaving the old friends in high school, and thus I hope that such a gift will remind him of the good old days we happily spent together and help him to feel better when he misses me.Anyway ,I do wish that Tom will like this present, which hopefully will bring him good luck.192 2006

Of the two universities listed above, I prefer the one in the north.The main reason is that the tuition is only 5,000 RMB for the university a year, compared with 8,000 RMB for the university in the south.This makes a big difference for a family like a mine, because my father is peasant and the only breadwinner in the family.Studying at the northern university can save my father big money.Another reason I take into consideration is the preference policy the northern university offers.Any candidate who chooses to study there may gain an extra 20 points, which greatly raises the possibility of my being admitted to this university.Of course, it doesn't mean that it will be quite easy to pass the entrance exam because this university has limited the number of qualified candidates to 10 only.However, I have been doing quite well in school, so I believe I can pass the entrance exam with flying colors.162 2.Compared with the northern university, the southern one is more to my liking.It is true that in terms of tuition the former is 3,000 RMB cheaper than the latter.However, that's not a problem to me because I can work my way through college once I get admitted.What counts is the reputation it has.Once I enter this school, my future career is guaranteed.Also, the university in the south recruits 20 new students instead of 10, which means that I will stand a better chance of getting admitted.The competition is very keen, though, as you can see because this university doesn't give candidates any extra points.So all I can do now is study hard, pass the tough entrance exam, and qualify as a student of the university of my choice.135

2005

There is an old English saying that there must be a use for my talent.I have regarded it as my motto for many years.From my point of view, there is no difference between one person and another.With some useful talent, you will make your contributions to this society.When I was ten years old, there was an old man living at the corner of xx Road.He didn’t have the opportunity to study in school, but he learned how to make wood furniture.Every time people went to ask him to solve some problems of furniture, he was willing to help them.To my surprise, in his spare time, he would make some toys with small piece s of wood.Some of them were sold to the toy store and others were given to us.The moment I see the lovely toys made by this old man, I would remember the happy childhood.From this old man, we can see whatever kind of talent you have, you can find your own method to display your talent.The most important factor is your confidence.If you believe the saying that there must be a use for my talent, you will succeed.205

第五篇：上海高考英語(yǔ)作文萬(wàn)能公式

開(kāi)頭萬(wàn)能公式

原理：要想更有說(shuō)服力，就應(yīng)該用實(shí)際的數(shù)字來(lái)說(shuō)明。

原則上在議論文當(dāng)中不應(yīng)該出現(xiàn)虛假數(shù)字的，可是在考試的時(shí)候哪管那么多，但編無(wú)妨，只要我有東西寫(xiě)就萬(wàn)事大吉了。

所以不妨試用下面的句型：

According to a recent survey, about 78.9% of the college students wanted to further their study after graduation.看起來(lái)這個(gè)數(shù)字文縐縐的，其實(shí)都是編造出來(lái)的。

更多句型：

A recent survey shows / indicates that …

結(jié)尾萬(wàn)能公式一：如此結(jié)論

說(shuō)完了，畢竟要?dú)w納一番，相信各位都有這樣的經(jīng)歷：領(lǐng)導(dǎo)長(zhǎng)篇大論，到最后終于冒出個(gè)“總而言之”之類(lèi)的話(huà)，我們馬上停止開(kāi)小差，等待領(lǐng)導(dǎo)說(shuō)結(jié)束語(yǔ)。也就是說(shuō)，開(kāi)頭很好，也必然要有一個(gè)精彩的結(jié)尾，讓讀者眼前一亮，這樣，你就可以拿高分了！比如下面的例子：

Obviously, we can draw the conclusion that good manners arise from politeness and respect for others.如果讀者很難“顯而易見(jiàn)”，但說(shuō)無(wú)妨，就當(dāng)讀者的眼光太淺罷了！

更多過(guò)渡短語(yǔ)：

? To sum up, ?

? In conclusion, ?

? In brief, ?

? In short, …

? In a word, / In a nutshell, …

? All in all, …

更多句型：

? Thus,it can be concluded that?

? Therefore,we can find that…

? So, we can conclude that…

寫(xiě)作的“七項(xiàng)基本原則”

一、長(zhǎng)短句原則

工作還得一張一馳呢，老讓讀者讀長(zhǎng)句，累死人！寫(xiě)一個(gè)短小精辟的句子卻可以起到畫(huà)龍點(diǎn)睛的作用。而且如果我們把短句放在段首或者段末，也可以揭示主題：

? As a creature, I eat;as a man, I read.? Although the former is to meet the primary need of my body while the latter is to

satisfy the intellectual need of mind, yet they are in a way quite similar.? 如此可見(jiàn)，長(zhǎng)短句結(jié)合，抑揚(yáng)頓挫，豈不爽哉？牢記！

強(qiáng)烈建議：

? 在文章第一段（開(kāi)頭）用一長(zhǎng)一短，且先長(zhǎng)后短；

? 在文章主體部分，要先用一個(gè)短句解釋主要意思，然后在闡述幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)的時(shí)候采用

先短后長(zhǎng)的句群形式，定會(huì)讓主體部分妙筆生輝！

? 文章結(jié)尾一般用一長(zhǎng)一短就可以了。

二、主題句原則

國(guó)有其君，家有其主，文章也要有其主。否則會(huì)給人造成“群龍無(wú)首”之感！相信各位讀過(guò)一些破爛文學(xué)，故意把主體隱藏在文章之內(nèi)，結(jié)果造成我們稀里糊涂！不知所云！所以奉勸各位一定要寫(xiě)一個(gè)主題句，放在文章的開(kāi)頭（這樣做更保險(xiǎn)）或者結(jié)尾，讓讀者一目了然，必會(huì)平安無(wú)事！

特別提示：隱藏主體句可是要冒險(xiǎn)的！

To begin with, you must work hard at your lessons and be fully / wellprepared for the exam（主題句）.Without sufficient preparations, you can hardly expect to answer all the questions correctly.三、一 二 三原則

領(lǐng)導(dǎo)講話(huà)總是第一部分：第一點(diǎn)、第二點(diǎn)、第三點(diǎn)、第二部分：第一點(diǎn)、第二點(diǎn)、第三點(diǎn)

雖然繁瑣，可畢竟還是條理清楚?？脊賯兛次恼乱脖厝灰ㄟ^(guò)這些關(guān)鍵性的“標(biāo)簽”來(lái)判定你的文章是否結(jié)構(gòu)清楚，條理自然。破解方法很簡(jiǎn)單，只要把下面任何一組的詞匯加入到你的幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)前就清楚了。

1）first, second, third, last（不推薦，原因：俗）

2）firstly, secondly, thirdly, finally（不推薦，原因：俗）

3）the first, the second, the third, the last（不推薦，原因：俗）

4）in the first place, in the second place, in the third place, lastly/finally（不推薦，原因：俗）

5）to begin with, then, furthermore, finally（強(qiáng)烈推薦）

6）to start with, next, in addition, finally（強(qiáng)烈推薦）

7）first and foremost, besides, last but not least（強(qiáng)烈推薦）

8）most important of all, moreover, finally…

9）on the one hand, on the other hand（適用于兩點(diǎn)的情況）

10）for one thing, for another（適用于兩點(diǎn)的情況）

建議：不僅僅在寫(xiě)作中注意，平時(shí)說(shuō)話(huà)的時(shí)候也應(yīng)該條理清楚！

四、短語(yǔ)優(yōu)先原則

寫(xiě)作時(shí)，尤其是在考試時(shí)，如果使用短語(yǔ)，有兩個(gè)好處：其

一、用短

語(yǔ)會(huì)使文章增加亮點(diǎn)。如果老師們看到你的文章太簡(jiǎn)單，看不到一個(gè)自

己不認(rèn)識(shí)的短語(yǔ)，必然會(huì)看低你的作文。相反，如果發(fā)現(xiàn)亮點(diǎn)------一個(gè)

精彩的短語(yǔ)，那么你的文章定會(huì)得高分了。其

二、關(guān)鍵時(shí)刻思維短路，只有湊字?jǐn)?shù)，怎么辦？用短語(yǔ)是一個(gè)不錯(cuò)的辦法！

比如：

? I cannot

可以用短語(yǔ)表達(dá)：I cannot

? I

可以用短語(yǔ)表達(dá)：Iit.I am badly in need /want of it.這樣字?jǐn)?shù)明顯增加，表達(dá)也更準(zhǔn)確。

文章主體段落三大殺手锏

一、舉實(shí)例

思維短路，舉實(shí)例！提出一個(gè)觀點(diǎn)，舉實(shí)例！提出一個(gè)方案，舉實(shí)例！而且這也是我們揭示一個(gè)觀點(diǎn)最好的方式。在任何情況下，只要我們無(wú)法繼續(xù)文章，不管三七二十一，盡管舉例子！

In order to attract more customers, advertisers have tried every possible means in making ads, such as sound, light, colors, cartoon films and human performances.For instance, to advertise a certain kind of food, advertisers will ask an actor or actress to sit at a table and devour the seemingly delicious food while they film him or her.更多句型：

? Let’s take ? as an example.? Let’s take ?for example.? For example,?

? For instance,…

? One example is… and another example is…,二、做比較

方法：寫(xiě)完一個(gè)要點(diǎn)，比較與之相似的；又寫(xiě)完一個(gè)要點(diǎn)，再比較與之相反的。世界上沒(méi)有同樣的指紋，沒(méi)有相同的樹(shù)葉。文章亦然。只有通過(guò)比較，你才會(huì)發(fā)現(xiàn)兩者的相同點(diǎn)(through comparison）和（through contrast）。

下面是一些短語(yǔ)：

相似的比較：

likewise, similarly, be similar to?,in the same manner

相反的比較：

on the other hand, conversely, whereas, while, instead,nevertheless, by contrast, in contrast to/with?,in comparison to/with?,on the contrary, compared with ?

三、換言之

沒(méi)話(huà)說(shuō)了，可以換一句話(huà)再說(shuō)，讓你的文章再多一些字。

或者文縐縐地說(shuō)，是讓讀者更充分地理解你的觀點(diǎn)。實(shí)際

就是重復(fù)、重復(fù)、再重復(fù)！下面的句子實(shí)際上就三個(gè)字

I love you!

I am enthusiastic about you.That is to say, I have lost my heart to you.I am wild about you.In other words, I have fallen in love with you.或者上面我們舉過(guò)的例子：

I cannot bear it.可以用短語(yǔ)表達(dá)：I cannot put up with it.因此可以這樣說(shuō)：I cannot bear it.That is to say, I cannot put up with it.or I am fed up with/ am bored with / am sick of / am tired of / am weary of it.更多短語(yǔ)：in simpler words,/ put it more simply（簡(jiǎn)單地說(shuō)）

總之，如果我們經(jīng)常按照上面的方法練習(xí)，加上多多模仿優(yōu)秀范文，就一定能寫(xiě)出比較好的英語(yǔ)文章。