第一篇:高分作文的寫作模式修改2
高分作文的寫作模式
開頭段的寫作模式
一, 對立法開頭: 用于有爭議的觀點:
1.when asked about_______________, overwhelming majority of people think that____觀點_______for the following reasons.They believe that_進一步說明觀點.because of the For one thing, …………..For another,.,…………Therefore,………..But other people don’tThe reasons are as follows.Firstly…………..Secondly,………..As a result………… 2.There is a public/ general/heated debate/ discussion/controversy on/about the problem/ issue of _______.Those who criticize/object to/ oppose it argue that_________.They
believe that_________.The reasons are as follows.Firstly…………..Secondly,………..As a result…………
But people who advocate /favor it , on the other hand, maintain that ___.The reasons are as follows.For one thing, ……For another,……Perhaps the most important(the main, fundamental, primary)reason is that…………
As for me, it has both advantages and disadvantages.(或從中間選一種觀點支持或反對并且在第二段詳細論述)
(適合的主題)Topics: two day weekend(96)Reading selectively or extensively(99)Is the test of speaking English necessary?(2000)energy crisiscareer choicejob hoppingInternet in our lifeinfluence of TV or advertisement on TVShould old people live with their childrenFailureAdverse influence of TV(internet)on teenagersFaked productsPiracyin chinaComputer game
現(xiàn)象法:對某種社會現(xiàn)象,傾向,或問題進行分析,首先提出現(xiàn)象,再展開評論.
1.One of pressing/interesting/serious common----problems/questions/issues/phenomenon
2.According to a new study/ recent poll,more and more people begin to attach much importance to1
3.One of the biggest issues/ hottest topics/ most popular things/ most serious problems
4.With the(rapid/ marked/ amazing)development(improvement/ expansion/increase/
growth/ decline in….), more and more people begin to attach much importance to象.適用的話題有: going abroadpart-time jobjob-huntingjob-hoppingjuvenile
crimeunemploymentpollutioncorruptionenergy crisisinflationoverpopulationbirth controlfaked products
piracycomputer gamegeneration gap
三,提問法(可以同爭議法相結(jié)合使用)
通過提問一個或一連串的問題,可以激發(fā)讀者的興趣,從而引出主題。
1.Is part-time job necessary to the college students? Different people may hold different
opinion to this question.Those who criticize/object to/ oppose it argue
that__________________.They believe that____________________.The reasons are as
follows.Firstly…………..Secondly,………..As a result…………
But people who advocate /favor it , on the other hand, maintain that
___________________.The reasons are as follows.For one thing, ……For
another,……Perhaps the most important(the main, fundamental, primary)reason is
that…………
As for me, it has both advantages and disadvantages.(或從中間選一種觀
提問法框架結(jié)構(gòu)
Should…….? Attitudes towards/opinion of…..vary widely/greatly from person to person.Those who criticize/object to/ oppose it argue that__________________.They believe
that____________________.The reasons are as follows.Firstly…………..Secondly,………..As a result…………
But people who advocate /favor it , on the other hand, maintain that
another,……Perhaps the most important(the main, fundamental, primary)reason is
that…………Therefore,……….As for me, it has both advantages and disadvantages.(或從中間選一種觀
適用的話題有:should doctor tell lie to patients?Why people choose to go to college?Should SARS patients be isolated?Is euthanasia necessary and legal?
五,綜合法
段落展開句型
如何展開段落十分關鍵,將提綱中的主題句的內(nèi)容結(jié)合起來
原因結(jié)果句型:
There are probably three(several)reasons(causes)for this dramatic(marked ,significant)increase(decline, growth, change)in………First,……Second,………Third,……… As
result,………
Why have(did, are)………? For one thing, ……For another,……Perhaps the most
important(the main, fundamental, primary)reason is that…………, therefore,…………(or: one reason is that ………Another reason is that………Maybe the most important
reason is that……)
3)A number of factors/reasons can contribute to(lead to;result in;account for)the
change(increase;success;failure)of ……First,……Second,………Third,………
比較對照句型:
1.There are many advantages in/of……First,……Second,………Third,………
Just as everything has two sides, it also has many disadvantages.For example,………
2.There are many advantages in/of……First,……Second,………Third,………
But is it all good? When it comes to the disadvantages, the advantages gained in……are
often offset/ counterbalanced by the problems it entailed.一些在寫作過程中常用的句子
1.表示原因
1)There are three reasons for this.2)The reasons for this are as follows.1)It has the following advantages.2)It does us a lot of good.3)It is great benefit to us.3.表示壞處
1)It has more disadvantages than advantages.2)It does us much harm.3)It is harmful to us.e.g.However, everything divides into two.Television can also be harmful to us.It can do harm to our health and make us lazy if we spend too much time watching television.表示重要、必要、困難、方便、可能
1)It is important(necessary, difficult, convenient, possible)for sb.to do sth.3)It plays an important role in our life.e.g.Computers are now being used everywhere, whether in the government, in schools or in business.Soon, computers will be found in every home, too.We have good reason to say that computers are playing an increasingly important role in our life and we have stepped into the Computer Age.5.表示措施
1)We should take some effective measures.2)We should try our best to overcome(conquer)the difficulties.6.表示變化
1)Some changes have taken place in the past five years.2)The computer has brought about many changes in education.7.表示事實、現(xiàn)狀
1)We cannot ignore the fact that +從句
e.g.We cannot ignore the fact that industrialization brings with it the problems of pollution.To solve these problems, we can start by educating the public about the hazards of
pollution.The government on its part should also design stricter laws to promote a cleaner environment.1)Compared with A,B…
e.g.Compared with cars, bicycles have several advantages besides being affordable.Firstly, they do not consume natural resources of petroleum.Secondly, they do not cause the pollution problem.Last but not least, they contribute to people’s health by giving them due physical exercise.11.表示結(jié)論
1)From what has been mentioned above, we can come to the conclusion that…
e.g.From what has been mentioned above, we can come to the conclusion that
examination is necessary, however, its method should be improved.12.套語
1)It’s well known to us that…
2)As is known to us,….3)From the graph(table, chart)listed above,it can be seen that…
結(jié)論段的寫作
結(jié)論一般采用歸納概括、主題重述或提建議等方式。
綜合法
1.From what has been discussed above, we may safely/reasonably draw(come to, reach)the conclusion that it is necessary(essential;important)that effective(quick;proper)action(measure;regards)should be taken to end(correct;fight)the situation(tendency;phenomenon)now.For one thing,…….For another,…….If we(ignore/ are blind to / fail to learn the lesson/ the warning),we would pay a heavy price/ come to no good end/ end in failure.(后果性)We may have a long way to go before we reach the final destination.But once we are on the way, the chance to reach it is greater.(方向性)
第二篇:中考語文作文高分滿分寫作模式及例文(范文)
中考語文高分寫作模式及例文
距離中考越來越近,今天給大家推薦幾種中考閱卷老師偏愛的記敘文寫作模式,趁著時間還夠,趕快學一種等考試時用吧。
一、記敘文寫作模式
第一種:層層深入式(最常見的模式)結(jié)構(gòu):“入——遞(若干段)——合” 首段,開門見山入題; 二段,概括事件; 三段,時間開始; 四段,事件發(fā)展; 五段,事件高潮; …… 尾段,照應開頭。
例文:“五塊錢成交”
警察局拍賣腳踏車,出現(xiàn)了一個離奇的場面。
由于警察局尋回的失物往往無人認領,或者物主提出證據(jù)后又放棄不要,因此,警察局的貯物室里收藏的物品真是琳瑯滿目,令人驚奇。那里有各式各樣的東西:照相機、立體聲揚聲器、電視機,工具箱和汽車收音機等。這些無人認領的東西,每年一次以拍賣方式出售,去年密蘇里州堪薩斯市警察局的拍賣中,就有大批的腳踏車出售。
第一輛腳踏車開始競投,拍賣員問誰愿意帶頭出價時,站在最前面的一個男孩說:“5塊錢?!边@個小男孩大約只有10歲,或12歲?!耙呀?jīng)有人出五塊錢”,你出十塊好嗎?好,十塊,誰出十五塊?”叫價持續(xù)下去,拍賣員回頭看一下前邊那個小男孩,可他沒還價。稍后,輪到另一輛腳踏車開投。那男孩又出5塊錢,但不再加價。跟著幾輛腳踏車也是這樣叫價出售。那男孩每次總是出價五塊錢,從不多加,不過,五塊錢的確太少。那些腳踏車都賣到35或40塊錢,有的甚至一百出頭。
暫停休息時,拍賣員問那男孩為什么讓那些上好的腳踏車給人家買去,而不出較高價競爭。男孩說,他只有5塊錢。拍賣恢復了:還有照相機,收音機和更多腳踏車要賣出。那男孩還是給每輛腳踏車出5塊錢,而每一輛總有人出價比他高出很多?,F(xiàn)在,聚集的觀眾開始注意到那個首先出價的男孩,他們開始察覺到會有什么結(jié)果。
經(jīng)過漫長的一個半小時后,拍賣快要結(jié)束了。但是還剩下一輛腳踏車,而且是非常棒的一輛,車身光亮如新,有10個排檔,69厘米車輪,雙位手煞車,杠式變速器和一套電動燈光裝置。拍賣員問:“有誰出價嗎?”這時,站在最前面,幾乎已失去希望的小男孩輕聲地再說一遍:“5塊錢”。拍賣員停止唱價。只是停下來站在那里。觀眾也靜坐著默不作聲。沒有人舉手,也沒有人喊出第二個價。直到拍賣員說:“成交!5塊錢賣那個穿短褲和球鞋的小伙子?!庇^眾于是紛紛鼓掌。
那小男孩拿出握在汗?jié)袢^里揉皺的五塊錢鈔票,買了那輛無疑是世界上最漂亮的腳踏車時,他臉上露出了從未有過的美麗的光輝。
簡評
這種層層深入式,有時間先后,是一環(huán)套一環(huán),直到你的感情不由自主地陷進去,為他歡喜為他憂。
第二種:內(nèi)容并列式(比較常見的模式,也可稱“櫥窗展覽式”)結(jié)構(gòu):“入——并(若干段)——合” 首段,概括性開頭,直接入題。二段,并列內(nèi)容段A 三段,并列內(nèi)容段B 四段,并列內(nèi)容段C 五段,并列內(nèi)容段D ……
尾段,抒情、議論,照應開頭。
例文:拒絕平庸
奮筆疾書,我是一名平庸的考生。似乎是鐵的事實,高考是我們走出平庸的一個跳板。一、五只粽子
昨天是端午節(jié)。清晨,碎碎的晨光落了一地。我睜著惺忪的睡眼,一切都是那么地美好。伴著淡淡的清香,媽媽為我準備了早餐——五只粽子。我狼吞虎咽,吃了四個,實在吃不下了。
“趕緊把最后一個吃完!”媽媽吼道。
“我吃不下了。”我打著飽嗝。
“吃不下也要把最后一個吃完!”媽媽邊說邊強迫我,“你不知道,吃五個粽子就意味著五門高中。”
原來因為“粽”與“中”諧音??蓱z的屈原啊,您大概不會想到原本為了紀念您的粽子卻成了我們的文化“吉祥物”吧?請原諒我吧,我只是一名平庸的考生,我要通過高考拒絕我的平庸呢。二、一只鴿子
中午,沒有喧鬧,沒有汽笛,很安靜。但是,媽媽謀殺了和平!
媽媽買了一只鴿子,準備給我燉湯喝。媽媽說她聽別人講,高考前吃鴿子有好處。
可憐的鴿子,你是否是那個銜著橄欖枝的和平使者;你是否正浴著夕陽的余暉在廣場上悠閑散步覓食;你是否是那只“咕咕”起飛向往綠色與和平的鴿子呢?
可憐的“天然之子”鴿子啊,請原諒我吧,我只是一名平庸的考生,我還要通過高考拒絕我的平庸呢。
要怪,你就怪那些亂造謠言、糟蹋綠色的人吧。三、一棵樹
傍晚時分,金色的夕陽給校園鍍上一層金輝。
看完了考場,我正欲回家,路過一棵樹,但這并不是普通的樹,這里香火縈繞,這是一棵“神樹”。
媽媽硬是拉著我燒上一炷香。我畢恭畢敬,生怕打擾它的清夢。
親愛的樹啊,你既不是佛祖參悟眾生的菩提,你也與佛道沒有任何關系。我贊美你的綠蔭,贊美你的清新,但你需要的只是平凡地生長、只是一塊可以扎根的尋常土地,你是否“承載”了太多?
親愛的樹啊,請原諒我吧,我只是一名平庸的考生,我要通過高考來拒絕我的平庸呢。因為平庸,我們拒絕平庸;但如此“拒絕”,我們是否真的不平庸了?
簡評
本文獨樹一幟,構(gòu)思精巧。作者從文化、生態(tài)、人生負載三個角度,選取三個片斷,既相對獨立,又一脈相連,緊扣“拒絕平庸”的主題,或敘或議,敘議結(jié)合,在看似“平庸”中“拒絕平庸”,充分體現(xiàn)了作者的機智與膽識。
第三種:引人深思式(也可稱“領悟式”)
結(jié)構(gòu):“入——事(三兩段)——理(一段)——合”
領悟就是對所敘寫的人、事、景、物有深刻的感受,進而從中悟出深刻的道理。
注意!這里面理不可寫多,不能與事平分秋色,否則讓人難分是記敘文還是議論文了,易被人認為是“四不像”的文章!
有個學生在作文中寫道:考歷史時,有道題考某一事件的年代,他忘了,又想起曾在課桌上寫了這一事件的年代,于是慢慢移動試卷,在移動試卷的過程中、他展開了激烈的思想斗爭,快下考時,他大著膽子移開試卷,一看,沒有,才恍然大悟,原來坐的是別人的課桌!失望之際,心情一下子倒覺輕松起來。結(jié)尾他寫道:“鈴響了,雖然那一個空沒有填,但我覺得沒填比填了更好?!?/p>
無疑,作者對這件事的感受是深刻的,但我們是否可以從中悟出更具普遍性的道理呢?比如,我們可以加上這樣一句:“——得到某種東西的同時,不能失去比這更珍貴的東西?!比绻患舆@一句,只能使人感到,學生應該遵守考場紀律,做人要光明正大等等。加了這一句,就會使人領悟到:除了要注意自身的品德修養(yǎng)之外,在對待他人、社會、自然等方面,不也同樣要懂得珍惜你擁有的最珍貴的東西嗎?
由此可見,感悟,可以使筆下具體的人、事、景、物煥發(fā)出哲理的光彩,從而撥動讀者的心弦,并給人以思想的啟迪。也可以用下面5或6段來安排: 首段,以議論或引用名言開頭 二段,敘述事件發(fā)生、發(fā)展 三段,詳寫核心部分 四段,……
第五,闡述事理,抒發(fā)感想。尾段,照應開頭或引申
例文:這也是課堂
別以為只有坐在教室里,聽老師滔滔不絕的講課,那才是課堂,其實,生活中處處都有大大小小、形形色色的課堂。
那天早上,我應朋友之邀到他家中做客。朋友家中養(yǎng)了一只威猛的大黑狗,那狗膘肥體壯,差不多有一米多長,朋友躺在沙發(fā)上,并示意我坐下。沒料到,我剛坐下,那狗便對我“汪汪”狂吠起來。朋友見我有些驚慌,便對那狗喊了幾嗓子:“趴下,這是我朋友,不準叫!”那狗瞪了我一眼,“嗚——嗚”哼了幾聲,便不做聲了。朋友安慰我:“別管那笨狗,我們說我們的?!?/p>
我與朋友談得很投機。那狗也趴在朋友身邊,時不時蹭蹭主人的腳,還做出一些怪動作,逗得朋友哈哈大笑。朋友一時興起,對那狗喊道“趴下”、“打滾”,那狗不厭其煩的一會兒趴下,一會兒打滾。我看著有趣,走近那狗,沖它喊到:“打滾。”那狗動也不動,理也不理,我又喊了幾遍,它還是無動于衷。我急了,走上前去用力拍拍它的頭:“趴下?!蹦枪凡坏宦牐炊洳欢∫Я宋乙豢?。我又氣又惱:“死狗,我和你主人都是人,怎么聽他的不聽我的呢?”朋友仿佛看出了我的心思,便隨手從桌子上遞給我一盤火腿腸,讓我再試一試。我將火腿腸在那狗頭上晃了晃,那狗“呼”的一下爬起來,我拿起一小片火腿腸在狗鼻子前晃了晃,高聲喊道“打滾”,那狗看看我,又看看那火腿腸,咽了咽口水,乖乖在地上打了一個滾。我笑了,朋友也在一旁哈哈大笑。我又拿了幾片火腿腸喂那狗,結(jié)果,那狗溫順地蹭蹭我的腿,在地上連打了好幾個滾。朋友笑得更開心了,我卻一下子覺得索然無味。我把火腿腸全部倒在地上,那狗一下子撲過來舔舔我的手,然后搖頭晃腦吃起來。我坐在沙發(fā)上,看朋友那開心的樣子也笑了笑,但我心里卻是酸酸的。我明白了,那狗對我態(tài)度的轉(zhuǎn)變原來都是因了那盤火腿腸??杀。^(qū)區(qū)幾片火腿,就讓原本兇猛的狗喪失了骨氣,對人類百般諂媚起來。也許有人會說:“寵物嘛,總會有那么一點點的……”是啊,沒有骨氣的支撐,再兇猛、再強壯的狗也只配給我們當寵物。
狗是如此,人也一樣??纯次覀冎車环ο窆芬粯踊钪娜?,他們?yōu)榱私疱X、權(quán)力,不惜以骨氣為代價向自己的主子搖尾乞憐,對主子的話唯命是從,他們哪里知道,“骨氣”是多少金錢、多大的權(quán)力都換不來的??!一個沒有骨氣的人,就只能永遠趴在地上,做別人的奴隸。
離開朋友家的時候,那大黑狗搖頭擺尾送我到門邊,我拍拍它的頭,心中充滿了憐憫和惆悵,說實在的,我挺感謝朋友和眼前這只大黑狗,朋友的家就是一個大課堂,狗就是一本無字的教科書,它給我上了既生動形象、又深刻難忘的一課。
第四種:扇屏展開式(也可稱“扇屏式”,最后一段是扇軸)結(jié)構(gòu):“并——并——并……合” 首段,表現(xiàn)中心并列段A 二段,表現(xiàn)中心并列段B 三段,表現(xiàn)中心并列段C 四段,表現(xiàn)中心并列段D 五段,……
尾段,總結(jié)中心、揭示哲理等。
例文:平凡的感動
清晨,一縷陽光透過窗子,叫醒沉睡的我。呵!陽光滿室。房間里的一切都被溫暖的金色擁抱,悅耳的鳥鳴已在屋中流響。沒想到,在經(jīng)歷了一夜的苦雨孤燈,陽光竟不期而至。小小的感動在心中流淌,我聽到露珠升華的微笑。
黃昏,枯葉悠悠從樹上飄落,天邊的余輝還未散去,云且留駐,我要躲進白云深處,逃避那一點一滴如桂花般閑落的憂傷,似乎沒有理由,卻又難以驅(qū)散。叮咚的鈴聲忽地送來朋友來信,親切的話語,溫柔的慰安,竟讓干涸的眼淚流出,那份感動已刻在不泯的三生石上,永遠銘記。
夜涼如水,仰望星空,遙遙相對。寂寞的云影伴著孤獨的月亮跳起天音的共舞,手中的筆漸漸冰涼。驀然抬頭,桌角竟多了杯熱騰騰的茶;當冰涼的手指觸到溫暖的杯壁,那小小的熱量所帶來的感動,已將心靈的堅冰融化?!罢l言寸草心,報得三春暉”不愧朽的母愛所擁有的感動將傳承永世。
當我不斷接受著來自自然、友情、親情的恩賜,我也盡力地為我身邊的人帶來感動。朋友生日,一個親手編制的中國結(jié),使我們的心緊緊結(jié)在一起;母親節(jié),一束問候的康乃馨,讓剛強的母親眼里有了潮濕;面對跌倒在地的同學,“爬起來再走”,讓伙伴堅強地重新屹立……
不要小看這些平凡的感動,它是生活中希望的源泉;不要在乎生命中的缺少輝煌,人生的境界在于付出,不論是高,還是低,只要在生命的藍天里飛到極至,便是最好。
也許你是青石墻下那凋落的向日葵花瓣,但你接受了自然的感動,便會發(fā)出灼灼的生命光焰;也許你是干荷葉上的小螞蟻,眺望著天上的白云,但既接受了生命的感動,就能負起幾倍身體重量的擔子!
感動于愛你的人,給你愛的人感動,你的生命將會是絢麗的火花,平凡而美麗。
簡評
本文前四段為并列記敘的四個“扇面”層次,后三小段為感慨總結(jié)的“扇軸”層次,即前面寫幾個并列記敘段,最后來個結(jié)尾的議論抒情段,易于行文。
如果我們的考場作文能夠使用如上模式,在考試中就能夠快速構(gòu)思、行文,不會出現(xiàn)比較明顯的失分處。有一定的作文基礎就能夠得到評分標準中的二類文。因為這樣的作文,給閱卷老師的印象是:開頭簡潔,層次清楚,條理分明,首尾呼應。一般優(yōu)秀作文的優(yōu)點幾乎全具備了。
當然,這種給作文以一定模式的提法,會遭到一些人的反對,其實我們說的“五段法”,只是對作文規(guī)律的粗淺總結(jié),如果平時的作文中我們使用它,那就會使作文很早就能在較高層次上發(fā)展。
這里必須提醒的是:對“六段”的理解可分為“狹義”“廣義”兩種?!蔼M義”指把“六段”理解為文章中的自然段,這是為了便于操作。如果作文想往高層次發(fā)展,這“六段”可以理解為文章中的意義段,這是“廣義六段”。這樣就能夠沿著作文發(fā)展的規(guī)律發(fā)展,即從“無格”到“有格”,最后到形成結(jié)合自己個性的“出格”。
記敘文寫作要點
總要求:立意新深,蘊含豐富,記事生動,狀景生輝,抒情動人。
1、要寫自己最熟悉的,不要輕易虛構(gòu)編造。編造的往往是想當然的人和事,太簡單,不可能有生動的細節(jié),鮮活的場景,難感人;再說,大段或整篇的虛構(gòu),你的年齡、經(jīng)歷、學識還不能勝任,往往捉襟見肘,多有漏洞卻不自覺,常常是自己覺得成立,人家卻看出不真實甚至看成了笑話,本想文章感人,結(jié)果是南轅北轍。
2、要輕情節(jié)敘述而重情景描寫,不要在過程上折騰,千萬不要在漫長單調(diào)的情節(jié)敘述中追逐得瘦骨嶙峋,要善于精選一兩個、兩三個“點” ——生動鮮活的情景,或富于魅力的細節(jié),去描寫得血肉豐滿,并且一定要在感人之處潑墨如洗,非感人之處惜墨如金。
3、要能激起感情波瀾或能引發(fā)理性思考,也不要只是記敘,不妨結(jié)合記敘的人事再有些抒情與議論。
記敘文構(gòu)思
1、立意新穎深刻
立意就是確定文章的中心或主題,要做到深刻,就要仔細審題,推敲材料,善于由少見多、以小見大,善于聯(lián)系實際探究本質(zhì),見他人之所未見。
例文借鑒:往上走,往下走
一扇厚厚的鐵門“不合時宜”地成了這個單元的守門神。可惜的是沒人對它有好感。
我從此得多拿一把鑰匙,提著滿籃子菜的家庭主婦只得停下步子,放下菜籃子,然后開門;老婆婆面對這扇門好像面對一座山;夜歸人得摸黑掏鑰匙……
好似所有的矛盾都由這扇忠實盡職的鐵門引起,它委屈地承受著種種埋怨。不過,一件小事總算使它的名聲好了一點。一位老婆婆因提的東西太多而無法開門,剛好下樓的小伙子從里面開門后幫著老婆婆提了重物。此后,老婆婆逢人便說:“多虧了那伙子,也因為那門呀!” 原來真正的不方便還另有原因。假如兩人一起走到樓梯口,誰先去開門?假如兩人一前一后下樓,走在前的是不是開門后等著后面的呢?假如哪一次誰忘了關門,是怪張三還是李四?存在不便,存在抱怨,其實是因為人們?nèi)狈煌?,缺少因交往而產(chǎn)生的好感,感激,信任,體貼……
從那以后,人們可能有所思,有所悟,有所改變。
一天早晨,我正急急地走下樓,從樓層的縫隙間瞥見一位阿姨也在往下走。我不由放慢了腳步,心想還是慢點走吧,免得碰到。等我埋頭走到一樓時,見幾步之遙的她正一手撐著鐵門一面微笑著說:“快來,別遲到了。”我心中不禁涌起一陣感動,連謝都忘了說。
樓道中來往的人們也漸漸形成了習慣,兩人一起走到樓梯口,都會主動掏鑰匙;走在前面的一定會給走在后面的留門,然后一起有說有笑地走過樓道;如果誰忘了關門,后面的人不再高聲責問:哪一個只生了前手沒生后手!于是,鋼筋水泥的叢林里有了溫情。于是,門與門框的碰撞聲成了音樂。
我喜歡上了這扇鐵門,甚至有些羨慕它。因為,它見證了樓道中人情的溫暖正在一點一點地銷蝕門上的銹跡,并使它熠熠生輝。
簡評
文章所寫是一般人不會寫到的樓道里的一扇鐵門,圍繞這扇既給人帶來安全,又給人帶來麻煩的鐵門,寫出了樓道里的人們由冷漠對立到溫情交住的變化。正因“化大為小”和“以小見大”,使文章內(nèi)容的新穎;文中對比,文末的議論抒情,又增添了文章主題的深刻。不得不信:司空見慣的“瑣小”中,也能提煉出新穎深刻的立意來。記敘文才容易出彩。
2、選材精真新小
選材要講四個追求:一要精,二要真,三要新,四要小。
所謂精,就是要選擇具有代表性、典型性的材料,即選擇能夠反映事物本質(zhì),表現(xiàn)人物精神的材料。
所謂真,就是選擇真實準確的材料,即選擇自己有切實經(jīng)歷或感受的材料。只有真,才能寫出真情、真知,才能寫得具體生動,才能令人信服。
所謂新,就是選擇新穎的材料———生活中的新鮮事,或者老素材的新發(fā)現(xiàn);而且還要力求選擇生動的材料,材料本身新鮮生動,文章也就容易寫得活潑新穎。
應杜絕模式化、規(guī)律化的選材傾向,寫老師總牽扯到“蠟燭”,寫愛心總離不開“希望工程”或讓座,寫成功總想到愛迪生、愛因斯坦、張海迪……諸如此類,使人讀之生厭。新穎的材料是記敘文獲得高分的基本條件。
所謂小,就是選擇能夠表現(xiàn)主題、刻畫人物的小事,以小見大,用一滴水來反映太陽的光輝。切入的角度宜小不宜大,選小一點,容易把話說清楚。
例文借鑒:與你為鄰
你,我的同桌,我最好的朋友。
此前,我從來沒覺得我們之間有什么不同。
我們一起生活在這個高樓林立的繁華城市里,一起在公交站臺等車,一起在綠茵場上馳騁,一起傾聽啦啦隊女生的尖叫,一起討論巴薩vs國米;一起研究編程算法,一起約好報考深大計算機專業(yè),一起夢想著有一天我們共同開發(fā)的網(wǎng)站像youtube那樣在納斯達克掛牌上市…… 你高大健碩,眉宇間透出一股俊秀,班上的女生悄悄給你取了個外號——“小柏原崇”,而我卻只得了個“許三多”的美稱,說實在的,我還真有點嫉妒。你的學習成績雖然在班上不是最好的,但在球隊,你是最好的,教練經(jīng)常拿你當作榜樣來訓斥其他隊員,用他帶著方言的普通話說:“要想踢比賽,首先學習成績要好,進入大學里,會有更多的比賽機會?!蹦┝丝偛煌a上一句:“像某某同學那樣,踢球?qū)W習兩不誤。”
我最忘不了的是去年那件讓我煩惱的事,我生病了,尿血,是你曠課把我送到深圳友誼醫(yī)院的結(jié)石科去。當時數(shù)學課正上到復數(shù)這一章節(jié),是期末考試的重點和難點。每天下課之后你都會來到醫(yī)院看我,把你做好的課堂筆記給我看,第一次翻開筆記的時候我很感動,從沒見你這么認真的做過筆記,幾乎是把一節(jié)課上老師所說的每個字都記錄了下來……
直到高考前那最緊張的一個月,你卻忽然說你要回安徽老家。按規(guī)定,考生必須回原籍地參加高考,你說會放棄報考深大,因為深大在老家的招生人數(shù)較少,另外安徽的學習環(huán)境,使用教材與深圳不同,猶豫再三,還是決定放棄。
今天,我們會同時走進考場,為自己的明天書寫一份答卷,不同的是,我在深圳,而你在陌生的老家。
我知道,在深圳還有很多很多像你一樣的同學,他們的父母,和所有深圳人一樣,用自己辛勤的汗水推動著城市發(fā)展,他們同樣擁有這個城市的光榮與夢想,彼此為鄰,相互依存。然而他們卻要比我們承受的更多,不情愿卻又不得不成為“高考移民”的一員,并為此放棄心儀的學校,使夢想走得更遠……
我祝福你,我的朋友,我們的鄰居,那些千千萬萬的農(nóng)民工和他們的孩子們。
簡評
一、這篇作文是在用心去感悟生活,是一種發(fā)自內(nèi)心的真實感受,從多角度對生活的觀察,多生活的了解,融入了一些青春色彩,完全達到題目的要求;
二、文章的語言生動,語句通順沒有前后矛盾,沒有故作深沉的裝腔作勢,有鋪墊,有懸念,有轉(zhuǎn)折,有升華,末尾點題,語句表達生動,亮點頻現(xiàn);
三、文章的思維獨特,邏輯嚴密,從自己的一個個切身感受通過剝洋蔥的形式慢慢展開,引發(fā)人對社會現(xiàn)象的思考,立意上有相當?shù)母叨龋?/p>
四、感情真實抒發(fā)了該考生對生活中的人、物、事的真實感觸、能打動人心;
五、有健康的價值觀,分寸把握到位,表達出自己健康的情感,使文章賦有靈魂。根據(jù)以上幾點,該作文是一篇難得的優(yōu)秀作文,以自己獨特的視覺精準的抓住“與你為鄰”這個命題,所以給了滿分。
3、構(gòu)思別出心裁
切入和截取都應有講究。切入:對于同一個材料,同一件事情要從不同的角度來審視,然后再選擇一個最佳的角度著筆,不落舊套,使人耳目一新。
記敘文有“六要素”,即時間、地點、人物、事件的起因、經(jīng)過和結(jié)果。寫作中,六個要素要做到有詳有略,有所側(cè)重,不能平均用力。一般地說,詳寫的部分就是重點部分,是體現(xiàn)中心的關鍵所在。詳寫有時會像電影特寫鏡頭一樣,把事物的細枝末節(jié)進行放大,讓讀者看到細微之處。詳略處理不當,會影響或沖淡中心的表達。
例文借鑒:拒絕平庸
“咯咯咯……”剛進家門,便被一陣嘹亮的雞鳴吸引。
考試時我可是個國寶,每周殺一只雞是少不了的。我走進衛(wèi)生間,準備看一眼這個遇難者。他是一只不普通的雞。
渾身烏亮,卻又透著光澤,不似那些灰黃的土雞。他的尾翅長而整齊,黑色的羽毛中點綴著些紅,像個神氣的黑將軍,配著紅纓,更顯英武。不過任他再有能耐,等待他的還是斬首。想到這里,我有些為他惋惜,這只野雞本該在森林、草原上過著自由的生活。
他看我進來,安靜了會兒,似打量著我,卻不同于其它的雞,只縮著脖子,逆來順受之樣。
他開始掙扎,盡管雙腿被綁,他還是盡力邁開步子、撲著雙翅,在衛(wèi)生間里上躥下跳。奮力一躍,前行一大步,想快跑時又被繩子帶倒。躺在地上休息一會兒,又起來,做好沖刺的姿勢,準備新一次失敗。
黑將軍啊黑將軍,認命吧!還是和其它的雞一般,接受現(xiàn)實,庸庸常常地享受一下生命中最后的安寧吧,何必如此費力不討好呢?我嘆息一聲,退出房間?!?正看書的我,聽到一聲凄切的長鳴。我知道媽媽對它下手了,看來它是逃不過此劫的。卻不想傳來一句:“兒子,快幫我逮雞,它溜掉了?!焙眉一?,有一手?。臎]聽說過有雞能逃過這割喉一刀的。我跑向廚房。
黑將軍站在廚臺上,威風地看著我,腿上繩子早已掙開。他發(fā)出得意的鳴叫,高亢、響亮、清脆,倒有一種虎嘯山林之勢。但這小小的廚房中,他又能逃向何處呢?我逼近他。他挑釁地看我一眼,向著窗戶縱身一躍,跳了下去。果然,他不是一只平庸的雞。
我俯在窗邊,看他黑色的身影,從容、優(yōu)雅地滑翔,在林立的高樓中這一抹黑顯得格外引人注目。麻雀為自己灰白的羽毛而羞愧,燕子因自己柔弱的身軀而臉紅。他好似雄鷹,華麗地飛翔、降落,悠閑地離開。
媽媽還在催促我下樓去追。而我腦海中卻浮現(xiàn)出他此前的身影:出眾的外貌,漂亮的黑羽。他不同于尋常野雞,臨終前,拒絕與同伴一般等待死亡。他選擇掙扎,更不同于麻木的家雞。廚房中響亮的長鳴,絕美的一躍,為他贏得了生的機會。
他以置之死地而后生的拼搏,拒絕了平庸,超越了平凡。他屬于自然。他本該離去。對于他,我只有敬意。
簡評
有一種生機勃勃的文學感覺,跳蕩在自信而稍有幽默的文字中,是“放膽作文”,也是“智巧作文”。文章情節(jié)明快,切入題意亦獨具慧心——在某種情形下,平庸等于“等死”。于是,此文亦“置之死地而后生”,在不同尋常的取材中,顯示了意匠和才思。
4、情節(jié)曲折起伏
文似看山不喜平,平鋪直敘的文章缺乏吸引力和感染力。這就要注意設置懸念,創(chuàng)造沖突,抑揚變化,合理逆轉(zhuǎn),使文章生動有味。
(1)懸念法,即設置疑團,借以激發(fā)讀者的閱讀興趣。通俗地說,它是在情節(jié)發(fā)展中設置謎面,使讀者產(chǎn)生急切的期盼心理,然后在適當?shù)臅r機揭開謎底。
例文借鑒:雪天,有這么一個故事 冬天來了,雪花如鵝毛般飄飛。
清晨,無事的我漫步在大街上,感覺到很冷。
前天,市里下令:無論在哪一個角落里所張貼的種種廣告單、宣傳單等等,統(tǒng)統(tǒng)都要清除干凈。由于這個原因,市里所有的清潔工都出動,開始全面清潔這個本來就很美麗的城市。我看著滿天大雪飛舞著,看著一幫清潔工忙碌著。
無意間,我發(fā)現(xiàn)對面的一堵光滑的墻上貼了幾張宣傳單之類的紙,一位年老的女清潔工正在那里小心翼翼地撕著那些紙??磥恚切┘埡茈y撕盡,那位女清潔工用沾過水的刷子在那些紙上刷了刷,然后再用手細心地撕。
我想,她的手肯定是冰涼的,但她不怕冷,她的心里有火。她很認真,連續(xù)清除了好幾張紙。她又走到另一張跟前。
但是,我看到,她的右手舉起來,這只手卻停在了空中,似乎定格了。又見她身子往墻面靠近了些。接著,我又看見她微微地搖了搖頭。怎么了,發(fā)生了什么事?我奇怪。
只見她專心看了一會兒,便緩緩離開了那張紙,沒有清除它。為什么不清除它?她忘了市里的規(guī)定嗎? 一串串的疑問在我腦中浮起。
那好吧,我倒要過去看個究竟,我想。
我正要起步,卻見另一個瘦小的女清潔工走近那張紙。她的舉動竟和那個老清潔工一模一樣:舉起右手,定格在空中;微微地搖了搖頭;專心地看一會兒,緩緩地離開。我更加疑惑了,下定決心去看看。
過了馬路,來到那堵墻前面。映入我眼簾的,是一張尋 人啟事。那上面寫著:趙潔,女,14歲…… 疑竇冰釋,我終于明白了一切。
雪花還如鵝毛般飄飛,但我不再覺得冷了……
簡評
文章懸念設置得巧妙。一名清潔工“右手舉起來,這只手卻停在了空中,似乎定格了”,“微微地搖了搖頭”,“緩緩離開了那張紙,沒有清除它”,這是為什么?另一個瘦小的女清潔工“舉動竟和那個老清潔工一模一樣”,又是為什么?看得出作者善于謀篇布局。正因為如此,文章才扣人心弦,引人入勝,道出了人間真情的美好。故事發(fā)生在普通人的身上,更讓人感受到真情的可貴。語言質(zhì)樸而又蘊藉,諸如“她的心里有火”、“我不再覺得冷了”很有味道,值得細品。巧設懸念可以引起讀者的急切期待,吸引讀者去尋求謎底,從而有效的增強文章的吸引力;利用誤會可以使文章生波瀾,有起伏,多跌宕,吸引人。
(2)巧合法
(3)誤會法,借助人物之間的各種誤會造成一定的矛盾沖突,進而鋪排情節(jié)。
(4)抑揚法,如《瑣憶》就是先抑后揚。作者回憶魯迅開始使用了抑筆,說魯迅“多疑”、“世故”、“脾氣大”、“不容易接近”等等;文章往下的回憶,則逐一解除了先前的這種誤解,推翻了聽來的別人的議論。(5)陡轉(zhuǎn)法(6)虛實法
可分為避實就虛與避虛就實兩法。所謂“實”,是指實在地寫出具體的現(xiàn)實生活中的人、事、景、物、情、理;“虛”指抽象地寫,重在調(diào)動讀者的想象,或側(cè)面烘托,或間接墊襯,多為抽象的表現(xiàn),它能跳出現(xiàn)實的束縛,通過創(chuàng)設情境,運用隱喻、象征等手法,為讀者留下廣闊的想象空間。虛寫與實寫,是相反相成、相輔相生的。在這種辯證關系中,虛因?qū)嵍娖涑橄?,能啟發(fā)讀者馳騁想象而獲得更高的藝術(shù)美的感受;實因虛更見其具體,能使直接的描寫更顯得氣氛濃烈、背景開闊、包孕豐富。(7)相錯法
從記敘的順序安排上看,主要有順敘、倒敘、插敘、補敘;從記敘的表達方法上看,主要有詳敘、略敘,直敘、婉敘;若敘述的事件比較復雜,還要用到總敘、分敘、平敘、間敘的方法等等。
第三篇:申論寫作高分技巧及模式
申論議論文文體寫作格式
一、總分式格式: 標題(12字左右)引論------------------------。(點明主題、根據(jù)主題、上升主題)(300字)本論------------------------。(說明原因)(100字)------------------------------(過渡句)(50字)-------(措施).具體方法步驟,重要措施要從制定原因目的意義,加以論證.---------------.(700)結(jié)論--------.重申問題及解決意義,發(fā)出號召或希望.(150)(以上以1200字為例)
二、分總式(平行)格式: 主標題(12字左右)引論------------------。(點明主題、根據(jù)主題、上升主題,重點點明要論述的類型.如:措施存在問題及原因意義等)(300字)本論 分標題(1)分標題(2)分標題(3).(700字)結(jié)論-------.重申問題,發(fā)出號召或希望.(150)(以上以1200字為例)
三、遞進式格式: ?標題(12字左右)?引論--------------------------。(點明主題、根據(jù)主題、上升主題)(300字)?本論------------------------(過渡句)(50字)--.(700字)?結(jié)論-----------------------.重申問題及解決意義,發(fā)出號召或希望.(150 ?(以上以1200字為例)
申論答題萬能模式
一、概括總結(jié)的基本套路和句式
一般而言,一個全面完整的概括主要由三個部分構(gòu)成:總述(對材料所反映情況的一個概述);分述(對材料中反映出來的內(nèi)容進行并列式或遞進式的陳述);抽象概括(對材料的主旨和反映的深層次問題進行升華和發(fā)揮。
(一)如何提煉總括句
總括一句話,高度概括全文主要內(nèi)容和主要問題。句式模型為:(1)“這篇材料談到了一個……的題”,中間可以加的修飾語包括“社會各界都關注的”,“目前所面臨的”。(2)“這是一篇關于主語+事件或行為的文體?!逼渲?,主語是文章涉及的主要任務的姓名或所涉主要單位名稱。文體是指所給材料的文章體裁,如新聞報道、調(diào)查報告、工作總結(jié)、講話、案例等。多數(shù)時候是案例。事件是指主語的動作或狀態(tài),也可理解為事件的某個階段。對于個別文章會有一件核心事件,就只需要以該事件作為定語就夠了。如“這是一篇關于純凈水廣告論戰(zhàn)的報道”。
(二)分述
就是要把總括句里涉及的內(nèi)容,根據(jù)并列或遞進關系分條分類地整理出來。這時候,可以根據(jù)材料的具體情況采用不同的方法和套路。
1.遞進式分析法。對于那些以縱向思路和結(jié)構(gòu)寫的給定材料,也就是以時間上的階段漸進性為序或邏輯上深入為序的文章,可以使用這種方法。如對一篇反映醫(yī)藥行業(yè)藥價虛高情況的報道。生產(chǎn)廠家自己定價,中間商層層加價,醫(yī)生或醫(yī)院為了自身利益給病人開高價藥,病人購買高價藥品。這是按醫(yī)藥流通在時間和邏輯上的四個環(huán)節(jié)來分析的。
2.主體分析法。某個事件或行為可能有好幾方的主體參與。在分述句里,我們可以從各方主體的角度進行分述答題。如汽車超載問題,就可以從各方主體的角度進行概括,包括治理部門、汽車車主、汽車制造商、修理商、地方政府等.3.關系分析法。有時候,一則材料中所涉及的事件是一環(huán)扣一環(huán)的,各個事件之間有明顯的關系,這時就適用關系分析法。如關于我國9家彩電企業(yè)結(jié)盟限價銷售彩電的一組材料??梢栽陉P系鏈條上進行歸納:九家彩電企業(yè)深圳結(jié)盟之后,國家有關部門對此提出了質(zhì)疑,專家認為價格聯(lián)盟是變相壟斷,消費者對此無動于衷,結(jié)盟商家內(nèi)部意見也不統(tǒng)一,最終導致彩電限價失敗。
4.分類分析法。對于一則材料所涉及的是不同類別的人事物,則可以進行分類表述。5.關鍵詞分析法。對于給定的材料,有時我們會感到無處下筆進行概括。這時可以將文中出現(xiàn)頻率高的詞語羅列出來,然后結(jié)合文中事實或觀點把它們串聯(lián)起來。這只適用于基本功較弱者。
(三)抽象或升華
基本句式為“這個問題(這種情況)涉及……需要在制度上(體制,宏觀調(diào)控等較高層次上)……”
二、提出對策的萬能模型
問題有輕有重,有緩有急,如果是急性事件,提出對策是由近到遠、先標后本、由微觀到宏觀;如果是慢性事件,提出對策的思路是由遠到近、治標先治本、先宏觀再微觀。
(一)由近到遠式
1.緊急狀況的近期、微觀和的對策,可以從不同的側(cè)面和角度提出幾條; 2.配套基礎和硬件設施上;
3.思想觀念上,領導重視,深化認識; 4.法律法規(guī)上的制定與完善
5、制度或體制上; 6.宣傳教育上。(二)由遠到近式
主要在順序上作個調(diào)整,從宏觀到微觀,先本后標。比如首先從思想觀念與制度更新上。
三、申論寫作的三大模式
申論文章的寫作可以按照三大模式來:總分式、三段式、層進式。
(一)總分式
先概括出總領句,先總說,再分說,結(jié)構(gòu)上會顯得更嚴謹些。分說可以從不同的主體或不同的立場或不同的角度進行分門別類地闡述.也可以從宏觀上區(qū)分政治、經(jīng)濟、文化和社會各個層面.(二)層進式
對文章整體按照邏輯關系進行謀篇布局,步步展開,層層推進。一般是由表層進入深層,由現(xiàn)象進入本質(zhì)。
(三)三段式:這是最普通的結(jié)構(gòu),先提出問題,再分析問題,最后解決問題。一個標準的范式,有破有立,述、評、析結(jié)合。
第四篇:雅思寫作高分
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第五篇:雅思寫作高分
雅思寫作大作文必看高分范文
TASK 2: 高分范文一
Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment;only governments and large companies can make a difference.To what
do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, an increasing number of people are concerned about environmental protection and regard it as one of the most important challenges.However, whether only governments and big firms have resources and powers to preserve our environment is a controversial issue.My view is that every single citizen could also make a huge difference.In the first place, it is clear that it is human activities that have the greatest impact throughout the history.Both environment contamination and conservation are the long-term process, and no single government or big company can meet this challenge alone.So whoever created the problem should be responsible for solving it;environment protection needs every one of us to continuously participate in.Moreover, the public’s wills and behaviors have critical influence on government’s policies and companies’ strategies.For example, if everyone says “no” to plastic shopping bags and paper cups, the companies that manufacture such products will switch to environmental-friendly substitutes in order to survive in the market.However, that is not to say that governments and large companies cannot positively contribute.Indeed, governments can enact laws and introduce programs to raise the public’s low-carbon awareness;companies can promote green products to change the public’s consuming habits.But they also need every citizen’s appreciation and support to bring good results.In sum, no effort is too small when we are protecting the environment.Meanwhile, local authorities and organizations must shoulder their responsibility to develop low-carbon economy at the macro level.Only by doing so can we assure that we could hand this beautiful planet to our next generation and the next generation after.TASK 2: 高分范文二-----Argumentation
The Internet has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades.Although some of these changes have been negative, the overall effect of this technology has been positive.What are your opinions on this?
The Internet has brought significant changes to our lives in recent years.However, there remains some disagreement as to whether the overall effect of this technology has been positive or negative.While there are certainly valid arguments to the contrary, I personally believe that the benefits of the Internet far outweigh its drawbacks and these benefits are twofold.First of all, it is an indisputable fact that the Internet has revolutionized the way we communicate.Despite the risk of social isolation-a problem occasionally seen in people who spend too much time at their computer terminal rather than relating to people in the real world-most of us have benefited greatly from e-mails and Internet chat programs like MSN Messenger.These incredibly useful and powerful tools of communication facilitate both contact with loved ones in faraway places and global trade.Moreover, the Internet has placed the entire world(and all of the information in it)at our fingertips.In earlier times, conducting research entailed long hours searching library shelves.Now, however, the same information can be accessed at the click of a button.Admittedly, not all of the information available on the Internet is reliable or helpful-there is a vast amount of material online that some would consider offensive or dangerous, ranging from pornography to instructions on how to make bombs.Nonetheless, I would contend that this free flow of information has generally been a very positive development.By way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that the Internet has had a positive impact on modern life because of its influences on communication and the flow of information.TASK 2: 高分范文三-----Report
With divorce rates and family breakdowns increasing globally, it is generally accepted that families today are not close as they used to be.Discuss the causes of this problem and offer some possible solutions to it.Divorce and family breakdown were virtually unheard of just 100 years ago.Now, however, almost half of all marriages fail.This phenomenon is symptomatic of the growing distance between family members in modern society.In this essay, I intend to explore the sources of this problem along with some possible solutions to it.Chief among the causes of this problem is the modern lifestyle.Today’s parents have to work harder than those of previous generations to support their families.Traditionally, one parent assumed the role of breadwinner, while the other-typically the mother-acted as the homemaker.Recently, though, double income families have become the norm.Consequently, an increasing number of children now grow up in a parentless environment.Little wonder, then, that they feel alienated.Another contributing factor is the passive and solitary nature of many modern forms of entertainment.In order to solve this sense of alienation within families, I believe we must first address its root causes.Perhaps the most effective method of doing this would be for governments to offer financial incentives to parents who choose to remain at home and take care of their families.Admittedly, such incentives would probably not fully compensate couples for lost income;however, they would at least soften the hardship of living on a single income and provide an alternative for parents who would rather remain at home but are unable to do so because of financial constraints.One further measure would be to promote more interactive leisure activities in the community through public education campaigns.In conclusion, I believe that this is clearly a problem of such complexity that no solution is likely in the short term.However, I believe that the measures outlined above would constitute a good first step.Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions.Some people think this is fully justified while other think it is unfair.Discuss both these views and give your opinion.As a result of constant media attention, sports professionals in my country have become stars and celebrities, and those at the top are paid huge salaries.Just like movie stars, they live extravagant lifestyles with huge houses and cars.Many people find their rewards unfair, especially when comparing these super salaries with those of top surgeons or research scientists, or even leading politicians who have the responsibility of governing the country.However, sports salaries are not determined by considering the contribution to society a person makes, or the level of responsibility he or she holds.Instead, they reflect the public popularity of sport in general and the level of public support that successful stars can generate.So the notion of “fairness” is not the issue.While those who feel that sports stars’ salaries are justified might argue that the number of professionals with real talent are very few, and the money is a recognition of the skills and dedication a person needs to be successful.Competition is constant and a player is tested every time they perform in their relatively short career.The pressure from the media is intense and there is little privacy out of the spotlight.So all of these factors may justify the huge earnings.Personally, I think that the amount of money such sports stars make is more justified than the huge earnings of movie stars, but at the same time, it indicates that our society places more value on sport than on more essential professionals and achievements.In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing.Does this trend have more positive or negative effects on society?
In more and more developed countries we see the following trends: incomes rise, people get married later and have fewer kids.The result is the demographics change and the population ages.While having more old people sounds like a good thing(as they tend to be kind and warm-hearted), it can have a serious impact on economies and societies.Consider, for example, that in order for a country’s GDP to grow it needs to produce more goods and services each year.With an aging population and more people retiring, fewer are left to work, creating an economic hole.The result is that such countries have to rely on immigration to fill the gap and this is a less-than-desirable solution.Consider also, that as more people reach their twilight years they will face increasing health problems and this puts huge pressure on health care and other social programs.In most countries the government pays for at least some of the costs of health care, not to mention things like pensions, all of which means a big bill someone has to pay for.To be fair, however, we should be careful not to direct our anger towards old people themselves.Old people can still make contributions to society, whether it means helping look after grandchildren, working part time or even doing voluntary work.On an individual level, old people can be a real treasure.To sum up, governments should recognize the challenges of an aging society and take the appropriate action.But in addition to fixing the short-term impact of an older society, they should also look at the bigger picture and do their best so that in the future we have a better age balance.