第一篇:小學(xué)生考試作文得高分的訣竅
小學(xué)語文考試作文拿高分的20個(gè)訣竅
隨著語文在小升初考試中分量的加重,我們有必要掌握一定的考試技巧,以幫助我們能夠在小升初的戰(zhàn)爭(zhēng)中搶占有利地位。下面就小升初語文考試中的“大頭”——作文,來說說如何在作文上拿高分。
宋代大文學(xué)家歐陽修曾有詩(shī)曰:“文章看落筆,議論馳后先,破石出至寶,決高瀉千川?!币馑际钦f寫文章要特別注重開篇落筆之處,如果下筆便石破天驚、涌現(xiàn)精華,則全篇就如高崖瀉水,氣勢(shì)如洪。明朝詩(shī)人謝榛也說:“起句當(dāng)如爆竹,驟響易徹?!蓖瑯訌?qiáng)調(diào)了開篇應(yīng)以爆竹驟響之勢(shì)震徹全文。可見。文章的開頭是相當(dāng)重要的,特別是考場(chǎng)作文更是如此。如何利用開頭在浩瀚文海中脫穎而出呢,筆者簡(jiǎn)略歸納出以下二十種方法,供參勉:
⑴欲揚(yáng)先抑,開發(fā)胃口
唉,老師怎么讓我和他坐一個(gè)桌呢?她可是我班最兇的女生啦!就因?yàn)檫@,大伙都叫她“虎妞”。――《同桌》
⑵開門見山,直截了當(dāng)
我和阿敏的交情可不一般――初中三年的同桌。對(duì)她,我有一肚子的話要說。――《同桌》
⑶描形繪神,印象逼真
她,長(zhǎng)得真丑:黃瘦的臉;尖尖的下巴;淡得幾乎看不見的眉毛下,一雙細(xì)瞇的眼睛;鼻子扁而大;一口參差不齊的牙齒,略有黃色??唉!甭提了,她的外表真不符合這么動(dòng)聽的名字――祝麗麗。――《同桌》
⑷自然交代,平引下文
新學(xué)期一開始,我就注意到一個(gè)問題:我們班三十三名男生,二十七名女生,男生兩人一桌恰好多一名,女生亦如此,必將出現(xiàn)一個(gè)男生和一個(gè)女生同坐一桌的危機(jī)??扇f萬沒想到這個(gè)危機(jī)會(huì)降臨到我的頭上。――《同桌》
⑸歌詞開頭,響徹云際
“明天你是否會(huì)想起/昨天你寫的日記/明天你是否會(huì)惦起/曾經(jīng)最愛哭的你??”一曲悠揚(yáng)的《同桌的你》從路邊音像書店傳了出來,那帶著綿綿情思的樂曲,把我的思緒帶回了三年前的時(shí)光??――《同桌》
⑹排比反復(fù),創(chuàng)造旋律
朋友,就是我可以為他獻(xiàn)出真摯情感的人;朋友,就是我可以對(duì)他付出全部信任的人;朋友,歡樂時(shí)與我分享,危難時(shí)與我同行。人生中沒有朋友,就像生活中沒有陽光。我就有著這樣的一個(gè)好朋友。――《朋友》
⑺設(shè)問開篇,無沿?zé)o邊
往事如煙,隨著時(shí)光的流逝,大都漸漸淡忘,而那雙眼睛,怎能使我忘懷?――《朋友》
⑻名言指路,開宗明義
培根說過:“無真實(shí)朋友之人,可以謂之真可憐而永陷于孤獨(dú)生活之人。”他的話道出了朋友的重要。是的,假如一個(gè)人喪失了友情,他簡(jiǎn)直無法生存在世界上。――《朋友》
⑼對(duì)比映襯,突出重點(diǎn)
隨著歲月的流逝,許多人漸漸被我淡忘了,然而,有那么一雙眼睛,一種聲音一個(gè)身影,至今縈繞在我的心頭,久久不能忘懷。――《朋友》
⑽倒敘開頭,吸引讀者
當(dāng)我們乘著離開國(guó)防教育學(xué)校的時(shí)候,不知道為什么,淚水竟然在我的眼眶里打轉(zhuǎn)。難道是留戀嗎?是留戀那一段雖苦雖累但充滿活力的生活,還是留戀那待人苛刻卻真誠(chéng)親切的軍人,我們的教官?――《朋友》
⑾撥亂反正,撥云見日
有人說,淡泊就是看破紅塵,看透一切,認(rèn)為一切都是假的、虛偽的??這種看法是對(duì)淡泊的曲解。如果我們翻一下詞典就會(huì)明白,“淡泊”是不追求名利的意思??――《淡泊》
⑿泰山壓頂,觀點(diǎn)強(qiáng)現(xiàn)
目前,校園攀比之風(fēng)肆虐,我認(rèn)為這種風(fēng)氣確實(shí)需要?jiǎng)x一剎。――《攀比風(fēng),可休矣》
⒀聯(lián)想象征,奇妙無窮
一個(gè)夢(mèng),曾經(jīng)在西方強(qiáng)盜的炮艦下埋葬,留下的是老一輩辛酸是淚珠不止的心痛和望眼欲穿的期盼作為見證。伴隨著流淚的長(zhǎng)江長(zhǎng)大的我們也就少年已嘗愁滋味,踩著前輩留下的印證期待,期待著有那么一天??――《期待》
⒁環(huán)境描寫,渲染氣氛
十月九日又到了,魯迅先生已經(jīng)逝世六十年了。從傍晚到子夜,靜靜地,一個(gè)人坐在窗前,任冷雨打著窗欞。燈下一盆吊蘭淡淡地涂抹一壁翠色書柜。夜風(fēng)蕩起,身上微微泛起寒意。想起了魯迅先生,淚水就滑落下來。
⒂題記為冠,哲理為先
世間萬物皆難逃自然辯證法,孰是孰非,孰優(yōu)孰劣,孰喜孰憂,豈可一言以蔽之?――《假如記憶可以移植》
⒃博覽群書,信手拈來
據(jù)說,在非洲的原野上,有一種食蟲的花朵,色彩絢麗,芳香異常,許多飛蟲抵御不了“誘惑”而葬身其中??――《抵御“誘惑”》
⒄抒發(fā)情感,以情動(dòng)人
暮色中,幾縷炊煙從農(nóng)舍里裊裊升起。我捧著一束梔子花,站在張老師的窗前。張老師,您還是那樣忙碌?該歇歇了吧,今天是您的節(jié)日――教師節(jié)。我?guī)е业氖斋@來看您來了。――《瑣憶》
⒅以物喻人,含義深長(zhǎng)
在一望無際的曠野上,一棵古老的樹,雖然生命已到了最后一刻,但它仍然倔強(qiáng)的生長(zhǎng)著。在它的身旁,一棵小樹正在抽出嫩嫩的芽。老樹的根枯了,它把生命的汁液輸給了小樹;老樹的葉黃了,它把綠色的生命注入了小樹。老樹歷經(jīng)滄桑,走完了它艱難的歷程。如今,小樹剛剛抽枝吐葉,老樹卻離開了它??這正像外公離開了我,他來不及接受我對(duì)他的報(bào)答之情,就匆匆離開了我。――《瑣憶》
⒆解題鋪陳,明示中心
責(zé)任,就是一個(gè)人分內(nèi)應(yīng)該做的事。軍人,有保家衛(wèi)國(guó)的責(zé)任;醫(yī)生,有救死扶傷的責(zé)任;教師,有培養(yǎng)接班人的責(zé)任。工人、農(nóng)民、職員、商人??人人都有自己的責(zé)任。在我們的社會(huì)里,各行各業(yè)都有許多盡職盡責(zé)的人,他們組成了一道道最美的風(fēng)景――請(qǐng)?jiān)试S我,從這道道美麗的風(fēng)景畫卷中擷取一幅動(dòng)人的畫面吧。
⒇設(shè)置矛盾,引人入勝
“我就不信,你在這個(gè)班生活了兩年多,對(duì)這個(gè)集體就會(huì)沒有一點(diǎn)感情???”這是今天早晨班主任陳老師對(duì)我說的話。我望著陳老師憤怒的目光,委屈的眼淚直在眼眶里打轉(zhuǎn),心理說:“陳老師,你誤會(huì)了??我怎么能不愛我們的班級(jí)體呢?”
第二篇:高中英語作文高分訣竅
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高考英語作文高分訣竅
一.高級(jí)詞匯
1.occur 替換 think of
Suddenly I had an idea that someone had broken into my house.→
An idea occurred to me that someone had broken into my house.It occurred to me that someone had broken into my house.2.devote替換spend
He spends all his spare time in reading.→
He devotes all his spare time to reading.3.seek替換want / look for
They sought(wanted)to hide themselves behind the trees.4.a(chǎn)verage 替換ordinary
I’m an average(ordinary)student.5.but替換very
The film we saw last night was very interesting.→
The film we saw last night was nothing but interesting.The film we saw last night was anything but boring.6.seat 替換sit
On his way to school, he found an old lady seated(sitting)by the road, looking worried.7.suppose 替換should
He is supposed to(should)have driven more slowly.8.a(chǎn)ppreciate 替換thank
Thank you very much for you help.→
We appreciate your help very much./ Your help is much appreciated.9.the case替換 true
I don’t think it is the case(true).10.on替換as soon as
As soon as he arrived, he began his research.→
On his arrival, he began his research..11.due to替換because of
He arrived late due to(because of)the storm.12.cover替換walk/read
After covering(walking)10 miles, we all felt tired.13.contribute to替換be helpful/useful
Plenty of memory work is undoubtedly helpful to English study.→
Plenty of memory work will undoubtedly contribute to English study.14.round the corner 替換 coming soon/ nearby
① The summer vacation is round the corner(coming).Do you have any plans?
② Li Ming studies in a school round the corner(nearby).15.come to light替換discover
The family were so pleased when they discovered the lost jewels.→
The family were so pleased when the lost jewels came to light.16.have a ball替換have a good time/ enjoy oneself
After visiting the workshop, we went back to school.Every one of us had a ball(had a good time).17.come up with替換think of
Jack is very clever.He often comes up with(thinks of)new ideas.18.set aside替換save
Some students think that they should set aside some of their pocket money for books.(2004天津卷)
19.be of + n.替換adj.The products are of high quality(very good)and are sold everywhere in China.20.refer to替換talk about/of, mention
The professor you referred to(talked about)is very famous.21.can not but / can not help but替換have to do
I could not but(had to)go home.22.more often than not替換usually
More often than not(Usually), the meaning of many words can be easily guessed.23.lest替換so that /in order that
I wrote down his telephone number so that I would not forget it.→I wrote down his telephone number lest I(should)forget it.24.be long for sth./ be long to do sth.替換want to do sth./wish forI want to see you very much.→I am long to see you.25.be caught up in/be crazy about/be absorbed in/be addicted to替換be interested in
He is caught up in(very interested in)collecting stamps.26.more than替換very① I’m very glad to learn that you are coming in September.→
I’m more than glad to learn that you are coming in September.(NMET 2003)② If there is anything I can do for you, I would be more than glad to help.(2004全國(guó)卷)27.perfect(ly)替換good/ very well
He speaks perfect(good)English./ He speaks English perfectly(very well).28.do sb a/the favor 替換help
Would you please do me the favor(help me)to turn down the radio? 29.the other day替換a few days ago
The other day my brother and I went to the cinema by bicycle.(NMET 1997)30.in the course of替換during
In the course of(During)the mountain-climbing, please help each other and pay special attention to your safety.31.the majority of替換most
The majority of(Most of)the interviewees prefer watching TV at home to going to the cinema.32.consist of替換be made up of
Our class consists of(is made up of)50 students.33.be worn out替換 be tired / broken① After five hours’ non-stop work, we were all worn out(tired).② My shoes are worn out(broken).Please buy me a new pair.34.become of替換 happen
What do think has become of(happened to)him ?35.a(chǎn)ttend to替換look after
36.on condition that替換as long as 37.nevertheless替換however
38.express one’s satisfaction with替換be satisfied with39.spare no efforts to do替換try one’s best to do 40.many a 替換many
41.be rushed off one’s feet替換be busy in doing 42.a(chǎn) handful of替換a little / some 43.meanwhile替換at the same time 44.get to one’s feet替換stand up45.beneath替換under
46.occasionally替換sometimes /once in while 47.for instance替換for example 48.seldom替換not often 49.wealthy替換 rich
50.a(chǎn)mazing替換surprising
51.a(chǎn)s a matter of fact 替換in fact 二.高級(jí)句型結(jié)構(gòu) ◆ It句型① It will be + some time + before…
It won’t be long before humans visit the Mars.② It is + adj./n.+ for sb to do sth.It is very important for us to learn computer well, because it has changed our life so much.He said since it was a new model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts.(2008年湖北卷)③ It is + 被強(qiáng)調(diào)部分 + that…
1)It is what Yang Liwei has done that encourages us a lot.2)Those who like reading extensively say it is through reading that we get our knowledge.◆ more …than any other 表示最高級(jí)
Among the optional courses, spoken English and computer study are more popular than
any one else.◆ 名詞從句
① It would mean a great deal to me to listen to the tape and learn what is covered in 全國(guó)卷 Ⅲ)②◆(非限制性)定語從句① The flat is in a building on Fangcao Street.It is not far from Jianxin Chinese School.→The flat is in a building on Fangcao Street,② It was quite an experience for us both,(2002 北京卷)◆ 分詞結(jié)構(gòu)
① I don’t know about others, but I used to have to work even at weekends doing ② We’ll mostly stay at home in the evening watching TV, playing games, and meeting 全國(guó)卷Ⅱ)③ Hearing this, a few people began to run after him.(2004 遼寧卷)
④ Born in American, Thomas Edison was a great scientist and inventor.(2008年湖南
卷)
◆ with結(jié)構(gòu)① A terrible accident happened yesterday,② ◆ 倒裝句 ① The library is to the east of the teaching building.→② Although we are tired, we are happy.→③上海卷)
④ May all your dreams come true!May our friendship last till the end of the universe.!(2007年湖南卷)◆ 被動(dòng)語態(tài)① Opinions are divided on the question.(NMET 2002)
② All classes are taught by teachers with rich experience in teaching foreign students.(2004全國(guó)卷 Ⅳ)③ New factories, houses and roads have been built.(2004 江蘇卷)◆ 巧妙的改寫
(1).Only 改成no one but
Only Tom passed the exam last week.→ No one but Tom passed the exam.(2).a(chǎn)s soon as …改成No sooner…than…/Hardly…when…/Immediately…/The
moment No sooner had we arrived at the cinema than the film started.(3).have sb/sth do/done
The girl was knocked off her bicycle and had her leg broken(her leg was broken.).(4).變換插入語的位置① However, they suggest fees should be charged low.→
They suggest, however, fees should be charged low.(NMET 2002)② I think this is a good chance for you to show your singing talent, and how well
you’ve learned Chinese.→
This is a good chance for you, I think, to show your singing talent, and how well
you’ve learned Chinese.(2004 全國(guó)卷Ⅰ)(5).用同位語代替非限制性定語從句
Meimei, who is seven years old, has been learning to ride a bicycle for several
days.→
Meimei, a girl of thirteen, has been learning to ride a bicycle for several days.(2002上海卷)
Shakespeare, a son from a poor family, a man of little education, wrote plays and poems that are read all over the world.(2008年湖南卷)
◆ 其它
(1)注重句子的開頭① 用with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)開頭
With the sun setting in the west, we had to wave goodbye to the workers.With his help, we've learned how to analyze and settle problems.(2006年湖南卷)
With the functions of inserting, deleting, moving and copying, it enables us to edit test, browse web page and download what we want.(2009年江蘇卷)
② 用非謂語動(dòng)詞形式開頭?。㊣n order to improve our English, our school held an English contest.ⅱ)Walking towards the cinema, he met a foreigner.(2)長(zhǎng)短句交錯(cuò)使用(注意:應(yīng)突出主題句;長(zhǎng)句子并非越長(zhǎng)越好)
◆◆ 相關(guān)過渡語
1).表示時(shí)間順序: first, then, afterwards, meanwhile, later,first of all, finally, at last… 2).表示空間順序: near, next to, far from, in front of, on the left, on one side…
3).表示比較、對(duì)照: like, unlike, such as, but, however, on the other hand, on the contrary, nevertheless, otherwise…
4).表示因果關(guān)系: because, for, as a result, therefore, thus…
5).表示遞進(jìn)關(guān)系: besides, what’s more, what was worse, moreover, furthermore,in addition, on top of…
6).表示并列關(guān)系: and, as well as, also…
7).表示總結(jié)性: in general, in a word, in short, on the whole, to sum up, in brief,to conclude…
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第三篇:怎樣讓考試作文得高分
怎樣讓考試作文得高分
眾所周知,作文是決定語文考試成績(jī)的“半壁江山”,因此作文的成敗往往決定了整個(gè)語文考試的成敗。那么怎樣讓考試作文得高分呢?我覺得以下幾點(diǎn)必須注意。
1、審題和立意審題,就是把命題者的意圖讀出來,把題目的各種限制審清楚,明確要我寫什么,怎么寫,寫到什么程度,真正做到全面領(lǐng)會(huì),深刻把握,不偏不漏、不折不扣地按要求寫作文。審題的準(zhǔn)確與否是作文成敗的關(guān)鍵因素。立意,就是要作者站在時(shí)代的高度,去觀察、認(rèn)識(shí)生活,提煉主題,使主題體現(xiàn)時(shí)代的精神。
2、標(biāo)題和段落標(biāo)題是文章的眼睛,也是閱卷老師對(duì)文章的第一印象。俗話說:“秧好一半谷,題好一半文”,可見題目的重要性。有些考生先寫正文再擬標(biāo)題,文章寫好后也許是沒有時(shí)間寫標(biāo)題,也許是忘了補(bǔ)寫標(biāo)題。擬題方法多種多樣,可以運(yùn)用修辭,可以引用俗語,可以化用古語,可以借用成語,可以套用流行語,也可以巧用其他學(xué)科公式或符號(hào)等等,可以根據(jù)自己的情況靈活運(yùn)用。段落:考試作文最忌三段式的結(jié)構(gòu)。把文章分為幾段更好?千字以內(nèi)的作文,我覺得分為5-8個(gè)自然段就可以了。因?yàn)樽匀欢畏值迷阶匀唬斤@得你成熟老練。另外,要把每一段的首句寫好。每一段的首句猶如人的眉目,把首句寫好,“眉清目秀”,整個(gè)段落都顯著精神。
3、文體和內(nèi)容作文試題要求“文體不限”。但文體不限不是不要文體,而是要你在選擇了一種文體后,一定要按這種文體特點(diǎn)寫作,要寫什么象什么。不可隨心所欲,寫成不倫不類的“四不像”文章。文章內(nèi)容方面:不假思索就能想到的東西,絕對(duì)不要寫;稍加思索想到的也不要寫;花上幾分鐘,想別人想不到的內(nèi)容來寫。記敘文最好將主人公設(shè)定為自己,用第一人稱入文,讓“我”的激情在文章中閃光,情真意切,引起共鳴。議論文切忌大話、套話、廢話,要避免空發(fā)議論,無病呻吟,濫提口號(hào),亂發(fā)號(hào)召,空表決心等等。作文可以虛構(gòu),“允許”編寫故事,但要做到“大膽想象,自圓其說”。
4、開頭和結(jié)尾應(yīng)試作文的開頭結(jié)尾,就是文章的刀刃。平時(shí)在課內(nèi)外所學(xué)的各種開頭結(jié)尾的方法完全可以用在應(yīng)試作文上。最好是開頭起筆入題,結(jié)尾點(diǎn)明主旨。為了給評(píng)卷老師一個(gè)好的印象,開頭結(jié)尾千萬不要涂抹。有道是:良好的開端是成功的一半。古人寫文章講究“鳳頭”、“豬肚”、“豹尾”,這很有道理。可有些考生作文來不及剎尾,或用一句話硬斷,或點(diǎn)上一串省略號(hào),這樣即使你雕出了“鳳頭”,壯大了“豬肚”,也會(huì)因?yàn)闆]有“豹尾”而不成其好文章。
5、語言和字?jǐn)?shù)考試作文語言要規(guī)范準(zhǔn)確,具有個(gè)性和活力。不要文白夾雜;不要使用方言詞匯;多用短句;可引進(jìn)部分時(shí)代新詞匯,名言警句,流行的通俗歌曲歌詞,口頭民謠,真正讓語言亮起來??荚囎魑囊话銓?duì)字?jǐn)?shù)都作了規(guī)定。我們必須按照規(guī)定去做。限最低字?jǐn)?shù)的,一定要寫夠數(shù)量或稍微超過50—100字才好。限最高字?jǐn)?shù)的,不要超過。如果沒有限最高字?jǐn)?shù),一般就是以作文紙為限。千萬不要自作多情,超出作文格子,以免出力不討好。
6、書寫和卷面作文評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)中,書寫都占相當(dāng)?shù)谋确?。卷面整潔與否直接影響著閱卷老師的心理和情緒,書寫工整,卷面清潔,讓人一看心中先喜三分,其結(jié)果是可想而知的。
7、檢查與修改考試作文也需要認(rèn)真檢查,看有沒有筆誤的錯(cuò)別字,有沒
有不通順的句子,有沒有需要調(diào)整的內(nèi)容。審查發(fā)現(xiàn)了錯(cuò)別字、錯(cuò)用了詞語一定要修改過來,對(duì)于句段該刪的要?jiǎng)h掉,該增的要增補(bǔ),只是要改得清楚、整潔,使人一目了然。不能因?yàn)樾薷亩绊懥司砻娴恼麧崱?/p>
第四篇:考場(chǎng)作文如何得高分專題
考場(chǎng)作文如何得高分
【技巧一】作文成績(jī)看字跡,得分要素是第一
任何形式的作文考試,閱卷老師打分時(shí),第一眼,看的是字跡。因此,寫作文必須要把字寫好。記住,考作文考的是內(nèi)容,而不是書法,切忌字跡潦草。
【技巧二】考試作文五六段,干凈整潔看卷面
考試作文中,要注意及時(shí)分段,三四個(gè)段落顯得少了,八九個(gè)段落,顯得瑣碎了些。除非有特殊情況,段落以五六個(gè)段落為好。此外,卷面一定要整潔,不要涂改得亂七八糟。我的看法是,考試作文每段最好別超過5行,頂多是5行半。切忌一段都八九行,寫成“大肚子作文”。一旦給閱卷老師視覺上的疲勞,影響他的心理,分?jǐn)?shù)就受影響。如果有必要,死拉硬拽也要注意分段。
【技巧三】開頭結(jié)尾要簡(jiǎn)練,最好首尾兩行半
除了切忌大肚子作文外,“大頭作文”也要不得。建議考生在寫作文的時(shí)候,開頭結(jié)尾占兩行半的卷面。頂多也不能超過三行半。想想看,一個(gè)開頭就占太多的空間,閱卷老師的視覺又會(huì)有瞬間的疲勞,也會(huì)影響閱卷老師的情緒。
【技巧四】作文首尾要打眼,豐富多彩出靚點(diǎn)
考試作文的開頭方法很多:六要素開頭法、題記開頭法、懸念開頭法、引名句開頭法、排比句開頭法、擬人式開頭法、設(shè)問式開頭法、對(duì)偶式開頭法、博喻加對(duì)仗開頭法,合用修辭開頭法、巧述典故開頭法,解題式開頭法、名人問答開頭法、詩(shī)文引用開頭法。希望考生們準(zhǔn)備好一些關(guān)于道德、學(xué)習(xí)、禮儀、愛國(guó)、美德等方面的典故、名人名言,到時(shí)候就用得上。至少,你看到作文的時(shí)候,腦子里會(huì)閃現(xiàn)出上述前七八個(gè)開頭方法。
結(jié)尾也很重要。一般來說,結(jié)尾是總結(jié)全文。如果是記敘文,要注意抒情。如果是議論文,則要注意歸納。無論如何,最好要扣準(zhǔn)標(biāo)題。怎么扣呢?如果你實(shí)在拿不準(zhǔn),就在結(jié)尾段的第一句,把題目說一下,然后歸納全文觀點(diǎn)就是了。
【技巧五】動(dòng)筆之前不要慌,想好題目列提綱
上面說了好幾種技巧,其實(shí)在具體操作的時(shí)候,列提綱很關(guān)鍵。譬如,寫記敘文要設(shè)計(jì)好開頭結(jié)尾,同時(shí)要把你敘述的事情分成幾個(gè)層次,一個(gè)層次是一段,中間如果能設(shè)置好一個(gè)過渡句或過渡段更好。列提綱的時(shí)候,一定要把開頭結(jié)尾寫詳細(xì)寫,中間各段,穿插哪些精彩的話語或名言俗語、詩(shī)詞典故,要寫準(zhǔn)。一個(gè)合格的學(xué)生,列提綱,大約5分鐘到8分鐘。時(shí)間要掌握好,如果時(shí)間緊張,提綱就要簡(jiǎn)練些。
【技巧六】想好主題和文體,非驢非馬不可取
寫作文,要么是記敘文,要么是議論文。一般來說,多是“總—分—總”結(jié)構(gòu)。記敘文的結(jié)尾要注意抒情和總結(jié)哲理,議論文最好是“1—3—1”或者“1—4—1”結(jié)構(gòu),中間的3或4,是分層解題。當(dāng)然也可以靈活采用夾敘夾議的手法。但是注意,千萬別議論文說了那么多事例卻不歸納主題,千萬記敘文忘記說事卻議論過多。因此,寫考試作文,事先要想好了,我寫的是什么文體,就按相應(yīng)文體的寫法來寫。
【技巧七】適當(dāng)克隆和“抄襲”,考前備料攢信息
考試前,建議考生翻閱大量的范文,積累一些考試作文的結(jié)構(gòu)。如果寫記敘文,最好翻閱《讀者》和《青年文摘》,其中的一些散文,結(jié)構(gòu)是很好的,可以把寫作的梗概和套路歸納出來。到考試的時(shí)候,你采用別人的“筐”,把自己的東西向里面裝就可以了。關(guān)于感情、愛國(guó)、人生之類的優(yōu)美語言,可以分別背個(gè)三五句,到時(shí)候直接抄上去就行了,這不算抄襲。關(guān)于國(guó)家大事,時(shí)事政治和要聞什么的,也要注意搜集一下。譬如,去年有奧運(yùn),今年是建國(guó)60周年,還有汶川地震的感人事跡等,都可以做考試作文的題材。
1此外也有一些不太規(guī)范的方法,譬如別家的感人事跡,可以搬到自己家。這在考試的時(shí)候要靈活慎重運(yùn)用。
【技巧八】篇幅爭(zhēng)取要寫滿,多寫超邊不提倡
一般來說,中考文要求都不低于600字。這是相對(duì)于一般考生而言,達(dá)到這個(gè)字?jǐn)?shù),內(nèi)容還好,基本上都可以得到60%的分。如果作文字?jǐn)?shù)就在這個(gè)數(shù)字左右,得高分是不可能的。要得更多的分,建議考生,爭(zhēng)取合理安排卷面,把給的卷面寫滿到95%左右??紙?chǎng)作方的構(gòu)思方法
要訣一:化虛為實(shí),由實(shí)而虛。
面對(duì)較抽象的“虛”題,如果你就“虛”說“虛”,往往難以駕馭,容易寫得空洞。最好的寫法是化虛為實(shí),選取自己積累中能與題中“虛”義對(duì)接的“實(shí)”事,敘寫時(shí)由事(實(shí))而“虛”,升華主題,回扣文題。比如2008年廣東中考作文題為“虛”義色彩較強(qiáng)的“腳步”,有位考生化虛為實(shí)——敘寫“我”初三時(shí)情緒低落腳步徘徊,母親和同桌幫助“我”走出迷茫,踏上正確道路的具體過程,結(jié)尾由實(shí)而虛:“夢(mèng)中,天空不再灰暗,多彩的霞光照耀大地。我們踏著堅(jiān)實(shí)的腳步,追逐屬于我們的朝陽?!弊髡咄ㄟ^這段文字巧妙地揭示出“腳步”的寓意——堅(jiān)定樂觀,充滿自信,笑迎目標(biāo)??
要訣二:避俗就己,亮出個(gè)性。
“避俗”就是避開多數(shù)人可能寫的題材,“就己”就是從自己的生活經(jīng)歷中選取個(gè)性色彩強(qiáng)烈的素材,做到“人無我有,人有我新”。2007年江蘇鹽城中考作文《改變了我》,很多考生補(bǔ)入“老師”“父母”“名著”等極易撞車的詞語,而有位考生善于“避俗就己”,他補(bǔ)上加了引號(hào)的“我”字,以此為題材構(gòu)思成文,讓人耳目一新。
要訣三:巧對(duì)熱點(diǎn),精選角度。
有的考生準(zhǔn)備了很多“熱點(diǎn)”材料,例如汶川地震、北京奧運(yùn)等熱點(diǎn)素材,一見到題目就把這些材料不加變換地寫進(jìn)去,結(jié)果大同小異,鮮有個(gè)性。2008年江蘇南通中考作文《一道風(fēng)景線》,較多考生將抗震救災(zāi)中的諸多感人事例作為“風(fēng)景線”,構(gòu)思大同小異,角度相同,雷同現(xiàn)象十分嚴(yán)重。而有的考生雖然也寫抗震救災(zāi),但他們有別出心裁的切入點(diǎn)、個(gè)性化的體悟和精致化的描寫,做到所寫人物事例與其他考生雖然相同,但切入點(diǎn)和體悟卻來自自己的創(chuàng)造。如有位考生寫抗震少年英雄何翠青的事跡,巧妙地從她的姓名切入,又從她的姓名升華主題:“柳梢翠綠,草色青青,這是愛心的蓓蕾!這是生命的亮色!這是90后的驕傲!這是祖國(guó)的希望!何翠青,我的好妹妹!你永遠(yuǎn)是我心中一道亮麗翠青的風(fēng)景線!”這種“冷靜面對(duì)熱點(diǎn)、精心選擇角度”的筆法能給人新意撲面之感。要訣四:妙引“李杜”,古為今用。
“回到古代,復(fù)述經(jīng)典”是中考作文的常見手法,但不少考生往往沒有創(chuàng)意,要說“堅(jiān)忍不拔”,必引越王勾踐;論證“淡泊名利”,少不了李白放逐、陶潛歸隱,且視角陳舊,語言雷同?!袄疃拧蔽恼略?,引用貴出新:1.獨(dú)特角度選材顯示深厚積淀,盡量做到“人無我有”“人有我巧”;2.構(gòu)思中要融入個(gè)性化見解;3.引古及今,以古襯今;4.用文化的眼光審視話題,以情立意。2008年黑龍江中考作文《珍愛——》,有考生擬題《珍愛心靈的抉擇》,用“舉杯對(duì)月酌”“煙雨任平生”“神州何處望”這三句改寫過的古詩(shī)詞名句做小標(biāo)題,從李白、蘇軾和辛棄疾的不同“抉擇”中感悟他們所追求的不同理想,結(jié)尾寫道:“抉擇,不朽;珍愛,穿越歷史的迷霧;心靈,前人與后人,在這里交匯,彼此交融?!币霉旁?shī)的巧妙角度,人生哲理的個(gè)性解讀,使文章新意迭出,亮點(diǎn)頻現(xiàn)。
要訣五:個(gè)性思維,反彈琵琶。
比如話題“追求”,很多考生都會(huì)青睞“飛蛾撲火”和“流星劃空”這兩個(gè)比喻,但有位考生卻勇敢地對(duì)這兩個(gè)舊喻說“不”:“飛蛾,固然勇敢,可是光和熱并不可能屬于它,飛蛾的固執(zhí)只能留下一堆燒焦的碎片。流星的確讓自己發(fā)光發(fā)熱,可是那只是一閃而過,之后便灰飛煙滅,除了給人們?cè)鎏硪坏浪查g劃過的弧線的記憶,別的什么也沒有。有的人正是為了追求自己不可能得到的東西而自取滅亡,正如飛蛾一般;有的人正是為了追求那一時(shí)的風(fēng)光而付出過高的代價(jià),正如流星一般。這些追求,不要也罷。”文章至此筆鋒一轉(zhuǎn),由抑轉(zhuǎn)揚(yáng),熱情頌揚(yáng)樹根樂于奉獻(xiàn)的追求和雄鷹充滿自信的追求,以生動(dòng)的文字正面立論,具有強(qiáng)烈的思辨性和哲理性。需要注意的是,反彈琵琶法決不是信口開河,只有“反”得有理,“彈”得入耳,才能奏出令人稱頌的樂章。
考場(chǎng)作文要“特別關(guān)注”
一是立意要正確、深刻、新穎
“正確”就是要緊扣題意提煉主旨,使用材料,構(gòu)思成文;“深刻”就是要有針對(duì)性地抓住材料的主旨,確定作文的中心;“新穎”就是指文章中有自己獨(dú)特的見解。二是素材來源于生活
紛繁多變的當(dāng)代生活是寫好考場(chǎng)作文的源頭活水。作為一名中學(xué)生應(yīng)時(shí)刻關(guān)注與日常生活有關(guān)的熱點(diǎn)問題,把握社會(huì)跳動(dòng)的脈搏,緊跟時(shí)代的步伐,才能寫出具有時(shí)代感的文章,才能寫出呈現(xiàn)新鮮生活的文章。我們的語文老師要教會(huì)學(xué)生在確定文章的立意后,選材時(shí)要盡量著眼當(dāng)代熱點(diǎn),著眼社會(huì)新風(fēng),著眼當(dāng)代改革。簡(jiǎn)稱為“三化”:熱點(diǎn)化、現(xiàn)實(shí)化、現(xiàn)代化。只有用熱點(diǎn)的潮流去打動(dòng)閱卷者的靈魂,才能博得閱卷老師的青睞。現(xiàn)在好象有這樣一個(gè)不成文的規(guī)矩。高(中)考作文命題人在命題時(shí),都想方設(shè)法在題目上回避社會(huì)熱點(diǎn)問題,防止人們猜題押題。但是,在考生滿分作文卷中卻幾乎有80%以上直擊或折射或隱喻社會(huì)熱點(diǎn)、焦點(diǎn)問題。我們應(yīng)要求學(xué)生堅(jiān)持讀報(bào)紙、聽廣播、看電視,關(guān)注時(shí)政新聞。如巴以和談,伊朗、朝鮮核實(shí)驗(yàn),臺(tái)灣問題,中美關(guān)系,世博奧運(yùn),反恐斗爭(zhēng),世紀(jì)精典,伊拉克局勢(shì)及“三農(nóng)”問題,和諧社會(huì),以人為本,科學(xué)發(fā)展觀等等。央視臺(tái)的“焦點(diǎn)訪談”、“東方時(shí)空”、“高端訪問”、“實(shí)話實(shí)說”、“今日說法”、“案件聚焦”等內(nèi)容恰當(dāng)?shù)匾肽愕奈恼吕铮恼碌臅r(shí)代感現(xiàn)實(shí)性就自然亮麗在你的卷面上,給閱卷老師帶來驚喜,送你高分。
三是評(píng)價(jià)指向的要點(diǎn)
評(píng)價(jià)考場(chǎng)作文優(yōu)劣高下的標(biāo)桿越來越向理性方面傾斜,向思辯、誓理方向延展。一般的好文章在表達(dá)上有三性:人文性、時(shí)代性、思辯性。但考場(chǎng)好文章要求第一位是思辯性。其較容易把握的是“三關(guān)注”:關(guān)注大事、關(guān)注社會(huì)、關(guān)注人生。因此,考生的考場(chǎng)作文就應(yīng)放眼未來,要善于把事物放在大背景下去看、去想,用世界的長(zhǎng)遠(yuǎn)的人文的目光審視生命、生活、人生、社會(huì);要善于思辨,能看到事物的多面性,并用個(gè)性的目光去審視世界;要善于冷靜反思,打破常規(guī)格式,用個(gè)性的思考,別具的慧眼,去感悟世界和人生。我常向同學(xué)們講的兩句話是:“用積極樂觀的態(tài)度看生活,用哲學(xué)的頭腦想人生”寫出的文章人美、事美,情理美、心靈美。只有這樣,你的文章中才能于形象中見哲理,于質(zhì)樸中見深刻,于含蓄中蘊(yùn)真義,才能讓閱卷老師愛不釋卷,情不自禁地給你個(gè)最高分?jǐn)?shù)??傊紙?chǎng)作文,獨(dú)特?zé)o比,一錘定音,不許再來,只求成功,不求功名。
說的再到位一點(diǎn),叫做考場(chǎng)作文重在“做”作文。即①濃妝淡抹“做”面容(文面);②形散神聚“做”體形(文體);③三個(gè)三點(diǎn)“做”心靈(立意三個(gè)要求點(diǎn):正確、深刻、新穎;選材三個(gè)出發(fā)點(diǎn):熱點(diǎn)化、現(xiàn)實(shí)化、現(xiàn)代化;評(píng)價(jià)三個(gè)指向點(diǎn):思辯性、人文性、時(shí)代性;關(guān)注大事、關(guān)注社會(huì)、關(guān)注人生);④求異善變“做”個(gè)性(獨(dú)特、鮮活);⑤文化底蘊(yùn)“做”深沉(文采與創(chuàng)新)。
記憶,靠眼功→多看勤讀→積累素材,為我所用;
技巧,靠手功→多寫勤練→熟能生巧,巧能生花;
個(gè)性化,靠心動(dòng)→多想勤思→啟迪靈感,多元思維。
考場(chǎng)作文的格局布設(shè)
考場(chǎng)作文的布局,按材料之間的邏輯關(guān)系,可分為縱向式、橫向式和縱橫交錯(cuò)式三類;按材料的組織形式,可分為傳統(tǒng)式和創(chuàng)新式兩大類。近年來話題作文、不限文體作文不斷增加,給了學(xué)生“天高憑鳥飛,海闊任魚躍”的寫作自由。如能掌握一些創(chuàng)新式格局,對(duì)寫好考場(chǎng)習(xí)作是大有裨益的。常用的創(chuàng)新格局,有以下幾種——
一、日記式
日記是學(xué)生最熟悉、最常用的一種練筆形式。它用之于考場(chǎng)作文的布局,具有層次分明、過渡簡(jiǎn)便、感情真摯等優(yōu)點(diǎn)。如2001 年江蘇省鹽城市作文題是:以“考題”為話題,自擬題目,自定體裁(除詩(shī)歌外)作文。一考生以《都是考題惹的禍》為題,用三則日記展開。文章寫的是“我”這個(gè)差生在一次數(shù)學(xué)考試中因很多考題未做對(duì)而引起的一連串“麻煩”。三則日記分別寫的是“教室里老師刻薄的批評(píng)”、“寢室里同學(xué)惡意的譏諷”、“家庭中父母粗暴的責(zé)罵”。且三則日記巧妙運(yùn)用“小雨”、“大雨”、“暴風(fēng)雨”這些有關(guān)天氣的詞語來暗示情節(jié)發(fā)展,傳遞作者的心情。這篇文章因布局巧妙、感情真摯而獲得了高分。
二、鏡頭式
鏡頭式也叫剪輯式。運(yùn)用這種方法,可以把發(fā)生在不同時(shí)間、不同地點(diǎn)、不同場(chǎng)景的不同鏡頭按一定的順序有機(jī)的連接起來。運(yùn)用這種方法,可以突破時(shí)空局限,靈活自由,變而不亂,視感強(qiáng)烈。鏡頭式是考場(chǎng)作文中運(yùn)用頻率很高的一種布局方法。如2001 年湖北省孝感市中考題是:《那里留下了我的________》。一篇《那里留下了我的童年》的一類文,就是以鏡頭式布局的。作者用“小樹”、“小蠶”、“小故事”、“小風(fēng)車”為小標(biāo)題串起全文,文中寫與我一同長(zhǎng)大的小樹,寫讓我嚇得要死的小蠶,寫奶奶給我講的“從前有座山,山上有個(gè)廟??”小故事,寫舅舅給我做的漂亮的小風(fēng)車。用一組典型的鏡頭再現(xiàn)了我金色的童年,流露了作者對(duì)生我養(yǎng)我的小山村的深深依戀。如《校園生活二三事》(2000 年哈爾濱市中考題)就可用鏡頭式布局。
三、散點(diǎn)式
散點(diǎn)式是指圍繞一個(gè)中心,從數(shù)個(gè)點(diǎn)上進(jìn)行發(fā)散、鋪排,每個(gè)點(diǎn)都有一個(gè)精美的句段,數(shù)個(gè)點(diǎn)連成一體就是一篇優(yōu)美的散文。這種“散點(diǎn)式”習(xí)作最突出的優(yōu)點(diǎn)是層次明晰、語言優(yōu)美、情感濃郁。用散點(diǎn)式布局往往能出奇制勝。2001 年湖北省荊州市中考作文題是:寫一篇文章,題目中必須含有“喜歡”二字。一篇題為《我喜歡??》的習(xí)作是這樣寫的——
我喜歡在薄霧繚繞的早晨,看天邊冉冉升起的一輪紅日;我喜歡在熱浪炙人的中午,聽樹林里此起彼伏的蟬鳴;我喜歡在蛙聲震天的月夜,嗅田野里迎面撲來的稻花香;??全文精選美好的事物作為抒情對(duì)象,表達(dá)了作者對(duì)生活的熱愛和對(duì)美的追求,是一篇洋溢著青春氣息的考場(chǎng)佳作。
四、書信式
以書信的形式寫大作文,顯得自由靈活,親切真實(shí)。如2001 年重慶市中考作文要求是以“北京申奧”為話題作文,除詩(shī)歌外文體不限。一考生以《致國(guó)際奧委會(huì)主席薩馬蘭奇的一封信》為題作文,文中客觀地介紹了中國(guó)承辦奧運(yùn)會(huì)的實(shí)力,熱情地?cái)⑹隽酥袊?guó)人民為申辦奧運(yùn)作出的種種努力,激情地抒發(fā)了中國(guó)人民承辦奧運(yùn)的渴盼,也得體地表過了中國(guó)人民辦好奧運(yùn)的信心,文中處處洋溢著作者滿腔的愛國(guó)熱忱,本文也因形式靈活、內(nèi)容翔實(shí)、表達(dá)得體而獲得了滿分。
五、短劇式
技巧一:設(shè)計(jì)懸念,吸引讀者技巧二:開門見山,亮明觀點(diǎn)
技巧三:聯(lián)想回憶,巧妙敘述技巧四:突出矛盾,渲染氣氛
技巧五:巧用修辭,展示文采技巧六:描寫環(huán)境,烘托背景
技巧七:廣泛引用,突出主題
考場(chǎng)作文的關(guān)鍵詞
“準(zhǔn)確、新穎、到位、整潔”為考場(chǎng)作文的關(guān)鍵詞
一、準(zhǔn)確——審題的基本要求
所謂考場(chǎng)作文的切題,就是用別的事例或故事證明驗(yàn)證話題或所給材料所包涵的道理。從文體這一角度來看,無非是兩種方式。一是議論文的用論據(jù)來證明,二是記敘文的用故事(事件)來驗(yàn)證所給話題、材料的所蘊(yùn)涵的道理。所以,進(jìn)入寫作狀態(tài)時(shí),腦子里一定要牢記四個(gè)個(gè)問題:
我做出判斷了嗎?我判斷準(zhǔn)確嗎?我表達(dá)判斷了嗎?我支持判斷了嗎?這四個(gè)問題中,前兩個(gè)是審題的任務(wù),后兩個(gè)是扣題的內(nèi)容。任何文章都應(yīng)表達(dá)作者對(duì)某一對(duì)象的價(jià)值判斷:或是某一情感,或是某一觀念,前者用于記敘性文章,后者用于論說性文章?!芭袛唷笔俏恼碌木杷冢彩俏恼碌膬r(jià)值體現(xiàn),更是考場(chǎng)作文的抓分關(guān)鍵?!芭袛唷笔瞧渌淖值木劢裹c(diǎn)或歸宿點(diǎn)。
怎樣進(jìn)行準(zhǔn)確判斷呢?對(duì)話題作文而言,關(guān)鍵是選好一個(gè)恰當(dāng)?shù)慕嵌?。如果是大話題,我們要化大為小,分解話題:是什么,為什么,怎么樣。如果是小話題,則要小題大做,以小見大,寫出事件、材料所包涵的人生之理。
審題一般按以下步驟審題:理解題目含義——確定文章中心——圈定選材范圍——選定文體。例如,以“修養(yǎng)”為話題寫一篇文章,即先明確“修養(yǎng)”的含義一是指理論、知識(shí)、藝術(shù)思想等方面的一定水準(zhǔn);二是指養(yǎng)成的正確的待人處事態(tài)度。接著,選擇好它的具體含義,確定你要表現(xiàn)的主題,如“正確的待人處事態(tài)度是成功的關(guān)鍵”。然后,選擇你最拿手的一種文體,如議論文、散文、編故事、寓言等進(jìn)行寫作。
打好腹稿很重要。打腹稿其實(shí)就是一種審題,一種構(gòu)思。下筆之前,最好能在草稿紙上列出一個(gè)行文提綱,若是時(shí)間不容許,起碼也要在心中設(shè)計(jì)出整篇文章的框架、藍(lán)圖來,寫作時(shí)才有思路,不至于亂了頭緒。
二、新穎——避免選材“撞車”
做到選材新穎方法很簡(jiǎn)單:當(dāng)你拿起筆來,不假思索,馬上就能想到的那個(gè)“題材”,千萬不能寫!稍加思索所能想到的那個(gè)“題材”,也不能寫!文章的素材類型很多,或自然現(xiàn)象,或親身經(jīng)歷,或歷史人事,或現(xiàn)實(shí)事件,只要符合與自己文章的判斷相吻合,就可擇其一二用之。
正確做法是:你花上兩三分鐘時(shí)間,定下心來,自我掂量一下,自我估測(cè)一下,自己要寫的“題材”別人熟悉不熟悉,有多少是屬于自己的。一定要突出自己的體驗(yàn),自己的發(fā)現(xiàn),自己的發(fā)明。
也許有同學(xué)會(huì)問:“我的生活本來就狹窄,寫起來必定會(huì)撞車。怎么辦?”對(duì)此,我們深表理解和同情,當(dāng)今高中學(xué)生的生活面的確很不開闊。萬一挑來挑去,還是青菜蘿卜“大路貨”,如何是好?我以為,你總得設(shè)法放一點(diǎn)“味精”進(jìn)去吧,否則太乏味了!舉個(gè)例:多年前考“戰(zhàn)勝脆弱,選擇堅(jiān)強(qiáng)”,10多萬考生不約而同地寫了一種壓力——考試!這是大實(shí)話,十分正常。但10多萬人“英雄所見略同”,那就從“英雄氣短”了。有一位考生,也寫“考試”壓力,也寫挑燈夜讀,明顯地落入了俗套。然而,他機(jī)智地加了一點(diǎn)“味精”:夜讀中的“我”,突然發(fā)現(xiàn)書桌上的時(shí)鐘已經(jīng)快要耗盡電池,那根長(zhǎng)長(zhǎng)的、瘦弱的秒針,正爬到“45分”那一格,再也爬不上去了;但是,它仍然在頑強(qiáng)地顫動(dòng)、顫動(dòng),企圖向上攀升??呵,我就是這根長(zhǎng)長(zhǎng)的、瘦瘦的、生命不息、攀登不止的偉大的秒針啊!——讀到
這兒,閱卷老師的心弦被打動(dòng)了,眼眶甚至有點(diǎn)濕潤(rùn)。這就是作文中的“起死回生”,這就是奇妙的“味精”,這就是我經(jīng)常講到的高考作文中的“亮點(diǎn)”。有了“亮點(diǎn)”,你的作文才能向“發(fā)展等級(jí)”分進(jìn)軍!
三、到位——扣題的關(guān)鍵所在我們寫考場(chǎng)作文時(shí),表達(dá)自己的判斷的情感或觀點(diǎn)句從標(biāo)題到行文要有所體現(xiàn),這樣既可以使文章避免偏題或跑題,還可以不斷引起閱卷者的注意,避免閱讀評(píng)判的偏差。切題要開門見山??紙?chǎng)作文千萬不要羅嗦了半天還未入正題,這樣既浪費(fèi)了時(shí)間,又會(huì)引起閱卷老師的厭煩而難以獲得理想的分?jǐn)?shù)。明智的做法是:或設(shè)疑激趣,吊胃口;或單刀直入,步正題;或運(yùn)用修辭,入佳境;或抒情開篇,扣心弦等,例如《救救地球》開頭引入歌詞,單刀直入:“如果人類不保護(hù)地球,再過幾十年——’深深的太平洋,深深地傷心’了,人類也只能唱著’其實(shí)不想走,其實(shí)我想留,留下來陪你每個(gè)春夏秋冬’的歌詞離開地球了?!边@個(gè)靚麗的開頭怎不能引起閱卷老師的刮目相看呢?
扣題的主要類型有。
最常見的點(diǎn)題方式,開宗明義,反復(fù)申述,首尾呼應(yīng),一唱三嘆。
實(shí)扣:作文內(nèi)容與作文題所提供話題或材料要有實(shí)質(zhì)的本質(zhì)的聯(lián)系和契合,而不是貌合神離。
明扣:作文內(nèi)容與作文題所提供話題或材料要有明顯的相似語句。
全扣:作文的標(biāo)題、開頭、主體段落、結(jié)尾等處處都要體現(xiàn)作文題的命題意圖??垲}基本方法有。
方法1——字面重復(fù)點(diǎn)題法
在行文過程中,在某些段落或每個(gè)段落的開頭或結(jié)尾,用字面相同的句子重復(fù)標(biāo)題或者中心,反復(fù)點(diǎn)題,從而達(dá)到突出中心的目的。這樣做可以使文章中心從思維深處浮現(xiàn)于視覺表面,作者更便于進(jìn)扣中心作文,讀者容易把握,對(duì)評(píng)卷者的視覺和心理都產(chǎn)生強(qiáng)大沖擊。
方法2——似曾相識(shí)點(diǎn)題法
在行文過程中,似曾相識(shí)的詞語、句子反復(fù)出現(xiàn),不變的是基調(diào),變化的是細(xì)節(jié),不斷強(qiáng)化主題,又在變化中給人豐富生動(dòng)的感受。表現(xiàn)在形式上,在作文的多處反復(fù)點(diǎn)題,點(diǎn)題的形式每次都有變化,避免了字面重復(fù)點(diǎn)題法的生硬,變刻意點(diǎn)題為自然點(diǎn)題,顯得機(jī)智圓熟。
方法3——濃墨重彩點(diǎn)題法
避免前文點(diǎn)題不足的缺失,在結(jié)尾一段或幾段文字點(diǎn)題,以強(qiáng)大的視覺沖擊力,以多方面反復(fù)強(qiáng)調(diào)的力度,實(shí)現(xiàn)最大限度的扣題效果。
四、整潔——卷面美觀的起碼要求
在作文評(píng)分中,文面占了5分,很多同學(xué)卻不能得到。雖說字要寫好,非一朝一夕之功。但在考場(chǎng)上把字寫得端正清楚,只要有認(rèn)真的態(tài)度不難辦到。至于行文格式、標(biāo)點(diǎn)、刪改符號(hào),正確運(yùn)用也非難事,這兩點(diǎn)恰如人整潔的穿戴。一篇作文如果字跡潦草,隨意涂改,就像一個(gè)人蓬頭垢面,衣衫不整,惹人生厭。改卷中,考卷成疊,時(shí)間有限,眼看手批,緊張而疲累,如遇卷面整潔,字跡清楚,語言流暢,結(jié)構(gòu)有特色的作文,閱卷老師定然眼睛一亮,疲累頓消,一類卷,高分,乃至滿分,都有可能。而那些書寫隨便,亂寫亂畫的就很難得高分。
第五篇:情景作文如何得高分
北京卷情景作文
1、個(gè)人經(jīng)歷(I);
過去時(shí),以時(shí)間為線索,以I 為主角,偶爾有配角,一般用together with sb表達(dá)出來;常常有“道具”,用with結(jié)構(gòu)表達(dá)出來。
2、集體活動(dòng)(We);
過去時(shí),以時(shí)間為線索,以We為主角,經(jīng)常包括“討論”、“分工合作”等段落;
【高分情景作文框架及常見段落寫法】
在試卷分析中,我們發(fā)現(xiàn):
1、普通的作文往往上來就講故事,而高分作文卻能通過加上開頭段和結(jié)尾段,形成完整的文章結(jié)構(gòu),輕松獲得老師們的青睞;
2、普通作文能夠把故事說清楚,而高分作文能夠通過對(duì)細(xì)節(jié)的描寫,把故事講生動(dòng);
3、普通作文是生硬地寫故事,讀者一旦離開了圖畫,便不知其所云,而高分作文能夠通過對(duì)人物心情的描寫,讓讀者即使不看圖畫,也能身臨其境;
4、普通作文沒有場(chǎng)景、時(shí)間的過渡,故事情節(jié)缺乏連貫性,而高分作文善于利用簡(jiǎn)單的過渡詞,將原本散亂的“漫畫”變成連貫的“動(dòng)畫片”,讓故事連貫一致。
因此,我們的作文應(yīng)該寫成這樣的框架:
1、主題段
2、圖畫描述段
一圖一段,包含以下四大內(nèi)容:過渡/要點(diǎn)/細(xì)節(jié)/心情*
3、總結(jié)段
以下是對(duì)這種作文框架的詳細(xì)介紹。
一、主題段;
主題段要用簡(jiǎn)潔的語言講清以下四件事:
1、什么人?
2、在什么時(shí)間?
3、什么地點(diǎn)?
4、做了個(gè)什么事兒?
如果想要表現(xiàn)高超的寫作能力,還可以在主題段中融入第5件事:
5、這個(gè)故事是針對(duì)什么問題發(fā)生的,反映了什么深刻意義?
【常見寫法1】Last Sunday was memorable when I/we/our class had a meaningful and interesting spring outing/green action/monitor election/experience(on that day).解釋:這個(gè)寫法是用一個(gè)名詞來概括整個(gè)故事,如spring outing,monitor election等等。
【升級(jí)】
我們發(fā)現(xiàn),這個(gè)寫法其實(shí)是用一個(gè)memorable來感慨故事發(fā)生當(dāng)天的經(jīng)歷。Memorable是個(gè)形容詞,所以我們可以利用前面獨(dú)孤九劍中的第三件——倒裝——來進(jìn)行句式的升級(jí):
So memorable was last Sunday when....此外,我們還可以運(yùn)用感嘆句的技巧來升級(jí):
How memorable was last Sunday when...!
注意:劃線部分可以改成具體詞;
【常見寫法2】
Last Sunday was memorable when I/ we did sth/managed to do sth(on that day).解釋:當(dāng)不方便用一個(gè)名詞來概括故事的時(shí)候,可以用行為(動(dòng)詞)來概括
【升級(jí)】
So memorable was last Sunday when I did sth.How memorable was last Sunday when I did sth!
【終極寫法:在具體寫故事之前,先寫一句這個(gè)故事將體現(xiàn)的某種“深刻的意義”】
就像某些中文文章里寫的:“時(shí)光荏苒,流年不再,我們往往是真的失去了,才懂的珍惜。記得那是2002年的第一場(chǎng)雪......”
Thanks-giving/ Environmental protection/ Family education/ Family relationship/ Optimism/ Being optimistic/ Being brave is always of growing importance in our society/in our daily life.Such is a memorable experience that taught us another lesson of the significance/ importance of it.這個(gè)段落里面,加粗部分就是我們?cè)谧魑闹薪?jīng)常謳歌的一些“深刻的意義”。一定要把這些單詞記熟,尤其要學(xué)會(huì)用“Being + adj”來表達(dá)優(yōu)良品質(zhì)的用法。
二、圖畫描述段;
“一幅圖寫一段!”
1、過渡;(用時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)來過渡)
2、主題;
這幅圖講了個(gè)啥?
3、細(xì)節(jié)
圖畫中一般要包含六大細(xì)節(jié):
時(shí)間 地點(diǎn) 人物
天氣 道具 表情;
4、人物心情、想象或感受;
【常見段落寫法】
{1}“討論”段落;
(1)Last Friday, A heated discussion was held in our class on what/how/where to do...before(然后)a final decision was made that 用一句話來說討論結(jié)果.注:that引導(dǎo)同位語從句,解釋final decision的內(nèi)容
(2)Last Friday, A heated discussion was held in our class on what to do....Several opinions were given such as A,B and C before a final decision was made that最終討論結(jié)果(一句話).注:A B C都用doing sth結(jié)構(gòu)
{2}“出發(fā)”段落
(1)Early in the morning, with the sun rising from the horizon /east , we set out/started to do sth, chatting and laughing all the way,feeling extremely excited.(2)Early in the morning, bathed in the warm sunshine, we set out to do sth, chatting and laughing all the way, feeling extremely excited.{3}描寫“分工合作”的場(chǎng)景
(1)Some...Some...Others...Still others....(2)A is doing sth1 while B is doing sth2.(3)While B is doing sth2, A is doing sth1.(4)We joined our effort to do sth.(一起努力做某事)
(5)Works are assigned to us such as doing A, doing B and doing C.{4}描寫“感受”或“心情”
(1)Exhausted/ Tired as we were, we/I felt our/my time and effort worthwhile.(2)We were extremely joyful to see...(3)When the work was finally done, we all had in our heart a sense of achievement/accomplishment..(4)The work finally done, we all had in our heart a sense of achievement.{5}“到達(dá)”段落
(1)The moment/The minute we arrived at...,we started to do sth in a flash/immediately/with no hesitation.(2)No sooner had we arrived at...,than we started to do sth.(3)Hardly had we arrived at...,when we started to do sth.(4)Upon arrival, we started to do sth in a flash.三、總結(jié)段;
From this experience, I learned that...【常見寫法】
From this experience, I learned that we Chinese young generation/high school students/teenagers are supposed to take the responsibility to do sth1 instead of doing sth2.Only in this way can our society/ family /class/school/life be flooded with harmony and happiness.【必備例文】
(2010年北京卷情景作文)
Last weekend was memorable when I helped my grandparents arrange a trip to Beidaihe.Early on the Saturday morning, I,together with my grandparents,surfed the Internet for some necessary information such as the weather, the hotel and the train tickets.In the afternoon, I took the subway Line No.2 to the Beijing Railway Station to buy them tickets.To my surprise, there were too many people waiting, accordingly/ consequently,it took me almost 4 hours to get the tickets.I felt extremely joyful/delighted.In the evening,back home, I, with my grandma's help, packed into a suitcase a lot of necessity(必需品useful things)including clothes, shoes, map and umbrella.I was sure these things would help them enjoy themselves there.The next day, we went to the station together where I said/kissed/waved goodbye to them and saw them off.They seemed to be very excited.Hopefully they would have a great time.(I hope...= Hopefully...)
From this experience, I learned that we teenagers are supposed to take the responsibility to do whatever we can to care for the old/senior members in our families.Only in this way can our family be flooded with harmony and happiness.(2008北京卷情景作文)
Environmental protection never fails to be of growing importance in our daily life.Such is a memorable experience that taught us another lesson of the significance of it.Last Sunday, a heated discussion was held in our class on what to do for the spring outing.Several opinions were given such as going boating , visiting the amusement park and climbing a mountain before a final decision was made that we would go mountain-climbing.Early in the morning, with the sun rising from the east , we set out to climb the Maoershan mountain, chatting and laughing all the way.In the afternoon, the moment we arrived at the top, we surprisingly found different kinds of litters here and there thrown by the former visitors, such as cans, bottles, banana peels and plastic bags.We felt rather disappointed.In a flash, we started to join our effort to pick them up.Finally, we managed to get them together and put them into two different bins, recycling and non-recycling.Exhausted as we were, we felt our time and effort worthwhile.We teenagers are supposed to take the responsibility to do whatever we can for the environmental protection.Only in this way can our society be flooded with harmony and happiness.總結(jié):常用時(shí)間詞
Monday Tuesday Wednesday Thursday Friday Saturday Sunday
January February March April May June July August September October November December
in the morning/afternoon/evening
at noon/midnight
at/on the Father's day
at the beginning
/then/after that/ finally
as soon as/ the moment/ the minute 一....就
No sooner...than.../Hardly...when...Sb1 be doing sth1 when sb2 do sth2就在那時(shí),突然
While Sb1 be doing sth1, sb2 do sth2
立刻、馬上 in a flash/ at once/ right away
曾經(jīng) once/ the other day
After doing sth, sb started to do sth.【例句】
No sooner did we arrive at the top of the mountain than we found litters here and there such as...Hardly did I went back home when I started to pack some useful things in to a suitcase for my grandparents.The moment we arrived at the top of the mountain we found litters here and there.Old Fish was taking a shower when a beauty rushed in.While Old Fish was taking a shower, a beauty rushed in.總結(jié):常用地點(diǎn)詞
On the way to the gathering point
Outside the school gate
In the classroom/school hall
Back to school,...Back home,...In the car,...On the bus,...In the street,On the road,turn right on the second corner
turn right at the second crossing
【舉例】
On the way to the gathering point, we first climbed a mountain,and then swam across a river before(然后)we finally walked into a forest.【補(bǔ)充例文】“我為哥本哈根減斤碳”
5月28日勁松筆記
Low-Carbon living
Last Friday was memorable when we held an activity that we all lead a low-carbon life for a day.Early in the morning, with the sun rising from the east, we went to school by bike or on foot instead of taking buses or taxis.At school, no sooner did we finish the classes than we remembered to turn off the lights as well as the computers in order to save the energy.(意義)
When studing, we used double pages of each work sheet so that paper would be well saved.(意義)
After school, we went shopping in the supermarket as usual.However, this time, we chose to use the environmental-friendly shopping bags.From this activity,I learned that we teenagers are supposed to take the responsibility to do whatever we can for the environmental protection.Only in this way can our society be flooded with harmony and happiness.